Extended Work
Salvation
By jesse2
14 June 2009
A virus strikes L.A, forcing people to run and survive from the horror of the infected.

                                              Salvation



                                              DAY 1



                Health Blog “ Dr. Ross”


OCT 1, 2010


        Strange day, six patients have fallen ill to a strange new virus. I’ve never seen anything like this before. Patients are complaining of stomach aches, fever, and violent mood swings. I’m checking the medical journals to see if anything like this has been seen before. I was frightened when I treated one of the patient’s, I could have sworn one of them wanted to bite me.


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5 comments


  Eyeofthebeholder

         Should have slapped that bitch .. LOL X p




Mother nature

    Oh my, is this something we should be worried about?





Sally

    Click my profile to meet single girls in your area.







Daniel

    It’s nothing to worry about, just meth heads. Move along people, nothing to see here.






Joker1111

    Hey Sally, nice ;)








Day 2



                Health Blog “ Dr. Ross “

                                 October 2


        Anyone reading this, I advise you to lock yourself indoors. This virus has spread, I’ve locked myself in my office until help arrives. The patients we admitted yesterday have gone mad. One of them bit into a nurse’s neck, she in return began to scream and attack her co-workers, she even chased down a doctor down the hall. I can hear people screaming and banging on the door for help.

        If you read this, please escape from Los Angeles, run, or hide... oh Jesus they’re breaking in, it’s those fucking infected. Oh God, oh God.





Day 3



phone conversation

911 operator: 9-1-1.

Woman: Please help me!

911 operator: Ma’am, calm down. What seems to be the problem?

Woman: Are you fucking kidding me?

911: Ma’am , calm down.

Woman: Those fucking infected are here!

911: Stay in your house, everything will be fine.

Woman: They’re trying to kill my neighbor, my boyfriend ran out to help!

911: We’ll send a squad car, it should be there in ten minutes.

Woman: Ten minutes?

911: Ma’am, keep your voice down or I will hang up on you.

Woman: Someone’s in the kitchen ?

911: Run upstairs, lock yourself in your bedroom.

Woman: Baby, oh god, you’re hurt. Ronnie show me, what happened? They bit you, Ronnie, Ronnie, look at me.... oh god, NO!  ( Struggle )

911: Ma’am, get out of there, run away!

Woman: No, Ronnie it’s me, please someone help!




Day 4

                 My name is Alex Cruz, two days ago a virus hit Los Angeles. People started to go mad like rabid dogs. I saw one of my friends get bit by those infected. I saw him chase down his own girlfriend. I don’t know what happened, and I really don’t want to think about it.

      From that day, I just ran and never turned back. I barricaded myself in some random house. There was no one inside, didn’t bother to look anyway. this house belonged to a white family whose on vacation, found a list of chores listed for the person who was in charge of keeping the house in tiptop shape.


        1. Water The Plants Each Day
        2. Pick up the news paper & Mail
        3. Please Don’t Order Any Pay Preview , or Adult Material
        4. Go wild on the liquor cabinet
        5. You break, you pay ;)


    Guess none of those are going to happen. Well, maybe number four. I sealed myself shut,  boarded the windows with anything I could find. I found a laptop  in the kids bedroom, and a stack of adult magazines, go figure. The Wi-fi was still working, thankfully. So far the news is saying whatever is hitting Los Angeles is a super flu and nothing more. Bastards, they don’t want the public to know what’s really happening, they might have a hand in all this. Curse them to hell.

    I can hear those things running around, looking for new victims. I hope that help arrives soon. I wonder if my own mother and brother made it out of the city. I’m posting all over the internet about the truth, someone needs to know.




Day 5


        
                - Journal Of   Shawn Boyle -


        There wasn’t  much hope, nobody was coming to save us. We were on our own. My wife kept filling the children's heads that help was around the corner, it never was.

        I couldn’t let my family suffer, so, in the middle of the night while they slept, I murder them one by one. My wife put up a struggle, the little ones didn’t. They’re with god now, I’m here stuck in hell. I’ll receive my punishment soon enough.

        I know whoever reads this might call me a monster. But, you haven’t seen the things I’ve seen. Those monsters biting people, seeing your love ones turn into one of them. I saved my family that horror.

        I’m about to walk outside and put things right. An eye for an eye. I wonder what happens when you become one of them, do you remember who you were, or does it all fade away?


to be continued...

Reviews

Written by PurplePyro7 (366 comments posted) 14th June 2009
A great start- I thought you kept it interesting by jumping between viewpoints, and keeping it fast-paced. It adds to the sense of chaos. This subject matter is slightly overdone nowadays- you have an original voice, and a style that kept me absorbed, but I hope you don't let it become another 28 Days Later etc. That said, the last character in particular is interesting, and I was curious as to what he does next. I'd like to read more of it to see where you take it. :) 
PP7
Nice
Written by Meh (33 comments posted) 14th June 2009
Keeping in tone with the above comment of PP7 - the whole infected deal is a somewhat overdone subject.  
 
BUT in saying that you turned that overdone subject into quite an engaging story. You started it off and ended it brilliantly. The use of multiple viewpoints also added to the intensity of each characters situation, also adding an element of urgency which was bordering on desparation of self-preservation. 
 
Even though the story was jumping from one character and scene to another it was still easy to follow. I particularly like how you inluded the phone conversation i thought that was brilliant. 
 
Very intersted in reading more of this to see how it evolves. Im going to have faith that its NOT going to be another Dawn of the Dead, or 28 days/weeks Later. 
 
AWESOME read!! :grin

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