Poetry
Gemdrops
By patterjack
19 June 2009
Journeyman stuff

                                          Gemdrops

Raindrops on the casuarina needles 

begin their dismemberment of the meagre sunlight;

defying gravity they hang,

inverted necklaces in still air.

No slanting fall of intermittent rain disturbs them;

if there is any movement it is a slow

drop above drop

slide

down the green thread of the needle

and no cold breeze has set the pendants swinging.

A moment of sunlight;  the gleam of ruby, emerald or sapphire 

displaces the clarity and flash of diamond.


The neighbour gum stands with subdued hues,

olivine leaves and wet dark ochre bark

a background for the jewels' bright display. 

Trees of minerals.

But it is the casuarina that maintains 

this pyramid of gems.                      

Reviews
Hi Brian
Written by jean.day (2908 comments posted) 19th June 2009
Absolutely beautiful. Such visual quality. thank you for a good start to my morning.
Thank you Jean
Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 19th June 2009
Casuarinas are not an especially beautiful tree in themselves (except when they grow bronze tips ) but when the rain or dew hang on them they can be very showy. I do have a fondness for them however. 
 
I appreciate your comment highly 
 
patterjack
Lovely word painting
Written by ainsel (99 comments posted) 19th June 2009
...appears to have an almost conversational flow, but read aloud there's a gentle rhythmic nature to it. 
 
I love "Trees of minerals" - it conjures such a vivid image. 
 
It's light, but a perfect little gem. 
 
ainsel
Thank you ainsel
Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 19th June 2009
Light indeed-- but the light through the drops was on that occasion , extraordinary 
 
patterjack

Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 20th June 2009
With Jean in its visual quality. Constructed like a good photograph: foreground, background and detail interest. Enjoyed very much. 
 
Phil
Poor title
Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 20th June 2009
Thanks Phil for the review.  
 
I don't care for the title -- too twee altogether but what else could I name it ? 
 
I have lately been trying hard to follow my advice to others -- to avoid the abstract- but it is annoying the way they creep in -- there are a couple in this that I would like to remove.  
 
One day.... :sigh  
 
patterjack

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