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By patterjack
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19 June 2009 |
Journeyman stuff
Gemdrops
Raindrops on the casuarina needles
begin their dismemberment of the meagre sunlight;
defying gravity they hang,
inverted necklaces in still air.
No slanting fall of intermittent rain disturbs them;
if there is any movement it is a slow
drop above drop
slide
down the green thread of the needle
and no cold breeze has set the pendants swinging.
A moment of sunlight; the gleam of ruby, emerald or sapphire
displaces the clarity and flash of diamond.
The neighbour gum stands with subdued hues,
olivine leaves and wet dark ochre bark
a background for the jewels' bright display.
Trees of minerals.
But it is the casuarina that maintains
this pyramid of gems.
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Hi Brian Written by jean.day (2908 comments posted) 19th June 2009 | | Absolutely beautiful. Such visual quality. thank you for a good start to my morning. | Thank you Jean Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 19th June 2009 | Casuarinas are not an especially beautiful tree in themselves (except when they grow bronze tips ) but when the rain or dew hang on them they can be very showy. I do have a fondness for them however. I appreciate your comment highly patterjack | Lovely word painting Written by ainsel (99 comments posted) 19th June 2009 | ...appears to have an almost conversational flow, but read aloud there's a gentle rhythmic nature to it. I love "Trees of minerals" - it conjures such a vivid image. It's light, but a perfect little gem. ainsel | Thank you ainsel Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 19th June 2009 | Light indeed-- but the light through the drops was on that occasion , extraordinary patterjack | Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 20th June 2009 | With Jean in its visual quality. Constructed like a good photograph: foreground, background and detail interest. Enjoyed very much. Phil | Poor title Written by patterjack (1927 comments posted) 20th June 2009 | Thanks Phil for the review. I don't care for the title -- too twee altogether but what else could I name it ? I have lately been trying hard to follow my advice to others -- to avoid the abstract- but it is annoying the way they creep in -- there are a couple in this that I would like to remove. One day.... patterjack |
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