READING ROOM
Great Writing - Home
Read and review others' work
Articles on writing
Advice from the community
COMMUNITY
Talk to others in the forums
Events and Competitions
GW News
ABOUT GREAT WRITING
All About Us
Contact Us
WORK AWAITING REVIEW
GW IS...
Great Writing creative writing community is designed to prompt ideas and provide inspiration and motivation within aspiring and amateur authors. Whatever your topic; from love poetry to Doctor Who or Harry Potter fan fiction, Great Writing's online writing group is where you can make new friends and improve your creative writing.
WHO'S ONLINE
We have 977 guests online and 1 member online
Shorts
Bad Habit
By Ted_Iberrz
08 March 2006
Just dipping my toe in the water to see what lurks beneath

He picked at the cellophane and unwrapped it. Flicking the top of the pack open he pulled one of the contents and held it comfortably between index finger and forefinger. He leaned back in the chair and put this thing to his lips. An instrument of satisfaction, sometimes of guilt and shame. He removed it from his mouth and tapped it on the table. It would be easy to place it back in the pack, but why bring it out in the first place if he did not want it? The best policy was to just do it. Don’t think, just do it. He returned it to his lips and sucked at the tip. He remembered once at school doing the same thing and the stains it left on his teeth. The experience had not deterred him and  became more intense over the years. It was a habit he had tried to kick many times, but somehow he never could. He basked in the comfort it brought. The little stick held comfortably in his grasp. The wafting lines that flowed from its end. He leaned on the table, opened the notepad and took the implement from his mouth. Today was a day of guilt. He promised himself he would make a start but had not been able to. No reason, no ideas and no impetus. He stopped slobbering on the pen and returned it to the pack. Tomorrow, he would start again tomorrow.

Reviews

Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 9th March 2006
Very much enjoyed this. Welcome to the site.

Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 9th March 2006
Very much enjoyed this. Welcome to the site.
Been there, done that ....
Written by Bagheera (685 comments posted) 9th March 2006
:grin ..... even bought the T-shirt! 
OMG, how horrible the inescapable "gotcha!" of a Writer's Block feels - and how well you describe it!! :x  
 
Your choice of words misdirects the reader in the same way as a stage magician's hand movements :grin  
 
Don't worry about possibly getting "blindsided" in that other discussion, BTW> it's easy to make assumptions and as you've probably gathered nothing's actually set in stone as yet! Welcome to the Madhouse :p :eek
Not bad at all
Written by givitsum (651 comments posted) 9th March 2006
Must admit it had me going all the way to the end. GOTMI! 
 
Don't upset Gwynn!

Written by Ted_Iberrz (21 comments posted) 13th March 2006
:)  
thank you. 
I'm glad to be here ...I think :? ;)

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 15th March 2006
As an ex smoker I was convinced that's what it was about and you managed to hide till the end,that's rather good. I enjoyed it - sort of had a Chandleresque feel to it. 
Writers block is a terrible thing.The wrong people seem to suffer from it,it's not fair how come Archer, Mc Call Smith or Dan Brown never get it. It could be a yearly prize- the writer you wish would get writers block or in Archers case a breeze block
Interesting
Written by imawentfan (4 comments posted) 15th March 2006
I guessed it was a pen from the beginning but liked how I figured out it was writers block later. Great use of words, I could picture you sitting there trying to think of what to write. 
 
Welcome 
blackhairedgirl
Had me fooled.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 18th April 2006
I've cut down to ehm er ,er well cut down, and you seemed to be describing one of the rituals that I now indulge in prior to lighting up. 
 
But then I'm not very bright. 
 
By the way thank you for your recent review, 
 
Brian.

   Only registered users can rate and write comments.
   Please login or register.

Powered by AkoComment 2.0!

 Previous item   Next item