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Nameless
By piperlawrence
18 March 2006
This creative work is only a bit of it's actual story, as i only have presently the first page of my piece of writing. Enjoy


Nameless- by Piper Lawrence

Prologue- A door into Darkness

She was running, pushing around the corners, hopelessly climbing obstacles in her way, pushing on the walls in a drastic attempt for speed. Anything, it didn't matter what, just anything to escape from her chaser, her fearsome enemy and the terrifying promise of doom without mercy by his hands. Suddenly, a door swings open down the hallway, dark and rather distant by appearences, but to Shatter it's a possibility. Maybe if she'd have had more time, she would have wondered with much alarm how and why a mysterious door, or any door in fact, could open on it's own accord at such a convenient time. But then again maybe she wouldn't have, in any case the lines of possibility in that aspect were already drawn, there was no return. She runs through the dusty hallway, once clean and kept orderly, running with as much aggravated haste as her drained energy allows. Pushing the door even wider still, she takes a step forward into the door...

 And for a second it's as though time is on a complete and utter standstill. No sound can be heard throughout the mansion, not a muffled step on the staircase, or even the soft intake of breathing nearby. Shatter felt suspended in between the relavtive light of the mansion hallways, which wasn't even much, and the total and utter darkness from the inside of the door. Everything and everyone seemed to stand on edge and for that slight splintered second, there wasn't a world other than Shatter and the door and the light. There was no humans, there was no machines, there was no nature, there was no nothing, it just didn't exist.

 She was plunged head first into darkness, until it finally enveloped her hungrily. But even though she was scared, she held onto her mind and her heart. She remembered all the good times in her life, sh remembered going out places with friends. While the creatures around her howled and twisted in their pain of hopelessness, she kept sane by retreating into those calm, sunny moments, she'd take comfort in almost anything at the moment. But still she felt like she was drowning herself and all she believed in at this place, with these monsters of the darkest despair. The monesters were so near real, yet uch harsh atrocities to the parodies they represent, terrifying to the utmost point. Almost tasting the dark atmosphere around her, she feels somehow numb and scared.

 She was plunged head first into darkness, until it finally enveloped her hungrily. But even though she was scared, she held onto her mind and her heart. She remembered all the good times in her life, sh remembered going out places with friends. While the creatures around her howled and twisted in their pain of hopelessness, she kept sane by retreating into those calm, sunny moments, she'd take comfort in almost anything at the moment. But still she felt like she was drowning herself and all she believed in at this place, with these monsters of the darkest despair. The monesters were so near real, yet uch harsh atrocities to the parodies they represent, terrifying to the utmost point. Almost tasting the dark atmosphere around her, she feels somehow numb and scared.

Suddenly, a dark figure of billowing power appears, and with a single uttered word in a language that Shatter did not understand, banishes the creatures. With one last howl they disppear back to whatever hell they came from. A light appears above them both and pulls them back up.

She can finally see her rescuer. He looks, astonighly enough, a couple of years younger than her, around sixteen. His face seemed shrouded with shadows, so dark, yet his features played softly on his face. He was serious, not looking at all like the wannabe punks you see on the trains. Certainly not an angel, even though he got rid of those monsters and saved her. Who the heck was this guy?

"Who are you?" she asked, almost afraid for the answer. He looked as though he wasn't about to answer her, but suddenly he broke the silence. "It's funny Shatter, how from different sides of the dor we see such different things. From the outside of the door, its leads only into darkness, but from the inside it's a beacon of hope, a portal into light. My name is Shadow." 


 

Reviews
Shadow huh?
Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 18th March 2006
I think I like this Shadow guy. He sounds Dark and Mysterious, I can't wait to read the rest. I not much of a critic so I won't tell you what you need to work on just keep writing like this and you'll always have at least one reader. 8) :grin
great description
Written by Dark_Red (10 comments posted) 19th March 2006
Firstly- thanks a lot for your review of my story, 'The Night Watchman'.  
 
I really enjoyed reading this story-you've got the description of events and the thoughts in Shatter's head absolutely perfect. The lack of explanation in the story really makes you want to read more- I hope there's a second instellment coming up. 
 
One thing I'd change is the names. Although I know nothing about the setting, 'Shatter' and 'Shadow' are very stereotypical.
You're welcome
Written by bloodange77 (38 comments posted) 19th March 2006
I hope there is another instellment coming up too. I like it alot. :grin

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