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By patterjack
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20 March 2006 |
I was all of five years old when this occurred , and it has stayed with me for seventy years Childhood epiphany.
I sensed , I did not see them pass
five black birds against the moon
and felt at once the inevitable loss
of a revelation gone as soon as shown.
Arrow of unknown desire
they pierced my heart with lonely cry
and set my aching soul afire
with a rush of wings across the sky.
The vicious innocence of all
the dreams for which all children pay
tore from the earth the ragged pall
in which its soft corruption lay
for I was small , the earth was small and they
the dark harbingers of judgement day.
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Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | My thought at the end: wow. Very...wow. Sorry! I don't know what to say. Then I read it two more times. Then I realized I kinda stumbled on the part: the dreams for which all children pay tore from the earth the ragged pall in which its soft corruption lay I guess I just don't really understand - what dreams do all children pay for? If it's just me or if you don't wish to ruin it for other readers, then please send me a message because I would really like to understand this poem fully because I think that would enhance the feeling of 'wow' at the end. The first two stanzas are very powerful, though. Awesome writing and I'm amazed that it stayed with you for 70 years! Then again, this poem will stay with me for a while, too. I must add: great memory! | Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | | I agree, this is a powerful poem, and I also am not sure what it means. | beautiful Written by isobel* (26 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 | i think this is a beautiful poem, sensitive, and tinged with sadness and nostalgia. i sense so much emotion in such a small space (the poem is short) which is conveyed with tenderness and honesty. This is also helped by the description above, which moves me even more! It expresses the ambiguous feelings of childhood, and how, as adults, we plunder through them in an effort to realise their initial meanings - which seem to become more magical and less tangible with age. beautifully realised. And a perfect title too isobel x | Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 | | patterjack, I'm amazed... Written by mia_ms_kim (1057 comments posted) 30th March 2008 | that at five, you could sense this sort of thing. When I was five, I don't think I had a working brain! My child, 5, wants to be a spiderman so he can have webs coming out of his wrists. Wow. Mia |
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