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| Something Beautiful | |
| By LilGryphMaster | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
| 08 April 2005 | ||||||||||||||||||||||||||||
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I have written as an excercise in a class.
It started from a 3x3 sentence structure exercise. It is now in its final form... I hope. **Updated April 13th, 2005 at 9:55PM CST** The man rose from his stool under the low awning of the corner-shop. Out of the shade, he could once more feel the rays of the sun wash upon his skin. He turned around to wave at the girl in the booth. She waved back, smiled, and continued to serve the next customer. Licking the popsicle in his hand, the man savored the sweet, fruity flavor. He could feel the refreshing cold of the last bite slide down his throat and fill his body from head to toe. Just then, a cool breeze rushed past him, catching strands of his jet-black hair and the hem of his over shirt. As he continued down the concrete path, the world around him began to slowly disappear. He spread his arms like wings, took a deep breath, and pressed on, distractions of the street impenetrable of his blissful state. Rushes of the soft breeze continued to swirl by. With his eyes closed and his arms out, he felt like a bird. He used to watch them when he was a kid, wondering how they sounded, flying in the sky and singing their songs. He knew they could sing from the vast amount of books he read in his solitude. He knew that hearing their song was truly something beautiful. Of course for him, anything that made a sound would be beautiful in a life filled with silence. The man collided with an unknown force and fell to his knees, feeling the warmth and weight of another body fall down with him. He opened his eyes and found the figure of a young woman lying there next to him on the pavement. Quickly, without hesitation, the man helped the woman up and brushed her off. He turned to try and escape the embarrassment, but the woman heard him scuffling behind her and quickly spun around, slamming her white cane into his leg. The man turned around, trying to scream but producing no sound. The woman stood anxiously, "Are you okay?" He saw that the woman was speaking. He settled down and fixed his eyes on her lips, hoping she would repeat herself. He noticed she was wearing sun-glasses and holding the white walking stick used to bludgeon him earlier in her hand. He also noticed her head was pointed in a rather odd direction. But his eyes remembered their mission and darted back to her lips just as the words formed in her mouth, "Are you okay?" He nodded, but then soon realized she could not see the gesture. Thinking quickly, he grabbed her free hand and tried to send her a signal. "What are you doing?" she asked. He didn't see her speak. He closed her hand into a fist and pulled her thumb outward. "Thumbs up? Are you trying to tell me you're all right? I'm only blind, you know; not deaf!" The man placed his finger on her lips. After a short pause, he took her hand and placed it on his throat. The woman's hand shook, frightened and wanting to pull away. With her index finger, the man traced an "X"over his vocal chords. Her hand stopped shaking, and the woman realized the situation. "Oh, I see. You're mute?" He tugged on her thumb to confirm. The woman grinned, "Looks like we've got something in common, then." The man laughed. He made no noise, but the woman somehow could sense his amusement. She laughed in return. For a moment they were silent. The man stared at the woman, wondering what lay beneath those sun-glasses and noticing that they were awfully crooked. She started to speak, "Well then. I guess I should..." He reached over and gently pulled the frames back into place, firmly nestled on her nose. She gasped, startled. "Th.. Thank you." She said in a softer voice, smiling gently and pointing her head downwards, feeling quite silly now. He reached over to her cheek, almost as if by instinct, and touched the back of his hand to her skin. It was smooth. The continuing breeze passing by brought the tranquil scent of her perfume to the man's nose. The hairs on the back of his neck stood up, the smell heightening his senses. He had never felt or been so close to something so beautiful. She put her hand on top of his and closed her eyes. Never had a complete stranger treated her with such attention, such kindness. But she quickly realized that the man was indeed a stranger and pulled his hand away. "I'm sorry, but I don't even know your name." The man was taken back. He thought for a second. In her hand, he made a walking motion with his fingers and pulled her along the sidewalk. The man headed hastily back to the corner-shop he had just left. The girl smiled when she saw him, "Back so soon?" she inquired. He nodded, "Who's your friend?" The man shrugged. He pulled a notepad and pencil from his pocket and opened it up to a clean page. He quickly scribbled words on the paper and showed it to the girl. "She doesn't know your name?" The woman waited patiently and smirked as she heard the interaction between the two. The man nodded and wrote some more. "Sure, I can tell her for you. Ma'am, this is Frank Stephens and he's certainly pleased to meet you." Frank didn't take his eyes off of the woman's lips, wanting more than anything in the world to know her name, "Hello Frank. My name is Lisa Heartwell. I'm glad to meet you too." Frank grinned and shook her hand. He took the pad again and flipped to a new page. He wrote a few more words and the girl read them, "Well, Ms. Heartwell, it looks like Frank would like to buy you some ice cream. Would you care for some?" "I'd love some," she said graciously. The girl scooped out some vanilla ice cream into a waffle cone and handed it to Frank. Carefully, he guided Lisa's hand around the cone and she took a bite from the top. "Delicious!" She licked her lips in enjoyment. Frank went to pay the young girl, but she wouldn't accept it. "Don't worry, Frank, it's on me." Frank mouthed a "Thank You" to the girl. He then turned to Lisa and grabbed her by the hand, letting the cane hang between their fingers. He led her forward with his other hand on her shoulder. Something inside Lisa told her that she could really trust him now. He looked over to her. What he saw reminded him of the birds he admired as a kid. He knew that hearing their song must feel something like this. Together, they stepped out from under the awning of the corner-shop and the sunlight washed upon their skin once more.
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