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By no1butClo
24 March 2006
"...you have to make sure that the message received is exactly the same as the message transmitted by you, the leader..."


I hate not being able to say what I want, to
get my mesage across, be heard.

I used to think having a mouth was great,
but now my teeth get in the way,
my tongue sticks like a toffee, but sour,
and I can't get the words out
without choking.

Just have to keep it there,
decomposing, oozing poor literature,
verbal idiosynchrasies and
made up words.

I haven't the guts to spit it out
so I leave it to rot, and
take up my pen;

there are no mid-tones of voice
when I talk in black and white.

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Search for a new tongue?
Written by kitten_princess (31 comments posted) 21st April 2006
This takes me back... about 12 months, cramming for English Lang. Reminds me so much of the extract from "Search for My Tongue" in the anthology! The rotting imagery and the discomfort of a tongue... a source of inspiration, maybe? 
 
I thought it was pretty good. I liked the way you kept it simple, as if you were just talking. The feel and rhythm of speech was sort of broken for me by the bigger words like "idiosynchrasies" (sp?), but some of them worked well, like "decomposing" (*awesome* word). 
 
I don't know exactly what the last two lines are supposed to mean in the context of the poem... for me, it sort of highlights that you're talking simply, not sugar coating it... bit like a footnote. It's cool, though. Maybe you could tell me what it meant to you :) 
 
Overall, three thumbs up! (Jamie gave you a thumbs up too.) Keep it up! :grin  
 
Kitten xx

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