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By Nance
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27 March 2006 |
Prayer
Bless me God. Bless me in the minutes when I have doubts about you. Because my belief is not so strong as I’d like it to be. I these moments I need to feel how you’re taking my hand and helping me to choose my only right way. Bless me God. Bless me in the minutes when I’m falling down with my power and dropping my head. I’ll never forgive myself if I loose my confusion, if I lose my heart. Keep my eyes open to see the beautiful yellow leaves, the charming pelting rain, the exclusive large sky. Bless me God. Bless me in the minutes which are decisive for me; when there is only my mind is supporting me, when there is only one step is left to the end of my fight. When I don’t see the stars in the sky but for me they are still there. When I’m turning to you at my peril and waiting for your answer – the one which is changing my fate.
Bless me God. Bless me in the minutes when there is no fear in my soul. When I’m ready to make a mistake. When the doors of my cruelty, and heartstrings, and hard-heartedness are open. When there are thoughts in my mind which drive me crazy. Oh, how I need your reason in such moments!
Bless me God. Bless me when I’m praying to you and asking for your blessing. I am easily moved to tears when I sense that you are blessing me.
Because in these minutes I feel that my life only begins.
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Heartfelt but under-appreciated!
Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 3rd May 2006 | Hi Nance,
It has been revealed in the reviews of another posting of yours that English is not your first language and I think that is clear in this piece too. It's unfortunate because I think your ideas are good and from the heart, and in spite of a lack of Englishness you give a magical, musical feel to what you write. Writing in anything other than your first language is a recipe for trouble as however good you are there will always be small features that will niggle a native speaker, especially a pedantic writer!
Another thing is that I'm afraid your religious pieces may be appreciated by a fairly small audience. Assuming most readers/writers on this site are British, we are not known for our religiousness.
I like your honest style though.
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Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 9th May 2006 | Hello Espiral,
I am very content with your words, it's nice to realize that although with irritating and perhaps looking dull mistakes my work appeals to you.I can't help it so far. I have been learning English for a year, and trust me, I've been extremely trying to perceive everything. But this is a language, and very particular. And sich a thing - Englishness - will not arrive at once, overnight.. I hope with the course of days, and months, and years, I woudn't be pointed at this moment. I really, really believe.
As far as my style is concerned, I generally write what my soul tells, and with a bit of wit I compose something. If I am delighted with the results then there is something behind that.
I also drive a pen in my native language, but i can't stop writing in English as I love it too much.
Thank you for reading me. Hope you're good.
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