Poetry
my forest
By aritmosa
08 February 2010

no wild creatures turn up in my forest.

my forest simply is.

it is for the owl’s lonely hoot

and the spider’s stroll along the moon’s lips,

for the she-bears who do not rush to towns,

but move away behind coy shrubs,

for the great fear of the shepherd dogs,

for the cheese wheels, the handfuls of blackberries,

the pocketfuls of hazelnuts and close-up photos.

what wouldn’t I give for a blindfold game

among the fir trees, through waist-high snow,

or for getting merry with the summer’s resinous flavour,

calling over the shadows, the sun’s lovers

and the falling stars at night?

I do not want my forest to show me anything,

I just want it to be,

to care a bit about me, about you.

I want it to be neither in the headlines,

nor in any of the woodman’s nightmares,

nor quoted on the timber exchange.

I wish it to be the sleeve of your green pullover

through which your heart slips free,

prowling about like a falling leaf,

red-veined, a pool of gestures,

jokes, questions, buffoonery,

betraying a basso profundo of liberation. 

Reviews
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Written by toggle (141 comments posted) 8th February 2010
. . .you go away for a minute and when you get back people have been writing great stuff. I like your poem. I have said before that I find trees/woods so hard to write about but believe it's because of their greater wisdom. I like how your poem make me feel - serene, accepting. And I like the sense of continuity it creates - without the interference of humankind. I really love your line 
'I wish it to be the sleeve of your green pullover. . .' Splendid!
greensleeves
Written by aritmosa (12 comments posted) 13th February 2010
Thank you, Toggle, for your comment. I simply love forests. I have many forests to write about. As for the ending, well, what inspired me was a man playing and singing Greensleeves in the Cornemarket Street, here in Oxford. When the weather is fine, he is there with his electric guitar most of the time to enchant the passers-by. I am not sure how this legend is perceived today in the UK. Yet, reading about it, I wanted to keep its fire burning somehow.
enjoyed this
Written by fellpony (2924 comments posted) 13th February 2010
Some pretty images and clever thoughts here, eg, merry with the summer’s resinous flavour; neither in the headlines, nor in any of the woodman’s nightmares, nor quoted on the timber exchange  
 
Here and there I felt you were trying a bit too hard. I couldn't match the first line with the second for instance! or falling leaves prowling, or "basso profundo of liberation"...  
 
...but the overall effect of serenity and hoping to preserve a good place, is very pleasant.

Written by wendycat (2302 comments posted) 14th February 2010
As Fellpony says there is a real feeling of serenity and sort of 'safe place' about this. 
 
I did think it meandered a little far off the idea in places and that some of your lines were there because they sound nice, rather than for any real meaning. 
 
enjoyed 
 
Wendy
basso
Written by aritmosa (12 comments posted) 15th February 2010
Fellpony, perhaps it is not as clear as I wanted it to be... and maybe it is better that it is as it is... The beginning attempts to say that, even though the unknown depths of our soul are not visible, they influence us in unexpected ways. The falling leaves prowling and the basso profundo are connected with the same idea, as if with a return to an Adamic place. "prowling" was intended to be humorous, but now I am not sure if it is... I hope it is.  
 
Wendy, thank you for the meanders... They seem to fit with a stroll in the forest.  
 
Monica

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