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By patterjack
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07 April 2006 |
I stood on the site of the old Roman fort at Scarborough , on the coldest day I have ever experienced . It was late 1979-80 , and I could imagine a shivering legionaire leaning on his spear , looking out over the oily green waves of the North Sea , and muttering , in demotic Latin -- Norsemen , Go Home !
I allowed this one to feel a litle warmer . A Legionnaire Daydreams.
Sun at my back , I stand on the rampart
watching winged shadows from my flapping cloak
darken the earthworks.
I grow from the stones.
Sun , wind and earth ; and here am I
still guarding this world of mine; content
to know its strengths are mine ; that I hold firm
against the darkness and the hordes beyond.
Some season soon , the legions will form ranks
and stride their way along the arrowing roads;
and I rejoicing with them will gladly leave these shores
to march again to the centre of the world.
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Good Line Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 8th April 2006 | One line jumped out at me "I grow from the stones." For me it would make a better title, in fact Id re-write the whole poem round it,( except I don't write poetry) Just a reaction; feel free to ignore it and curse my ignorance. | Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 12th April 2006 | | Very good indeed. Excellent, subtle use of alliteration, and your descriptions are spot on. I love the feeling of loneliness and longing for home that you evoke in the last verse especially. | Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 12th April 2006 | | Patterjack you are a true pro when it comes to poetry! | Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 5th December 2007 | Just came across this one in the blue box. I now get more from it on second reading. It's such a complete piece and evokes such feeling of desolate longing for something out of reach. Still love that line which says so much about his condition. Jane |
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