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A Legionaire daydreams
By patterjack
07 April 2006
I stood on the site of the old Roman fort at Scarborough , on the coldest day I have ever experienced . It was late 1979-80 , and I could imagine a shivering legionaire leaning on his spear , looking out over the oily green waves of the North Sea , and muttering , in demotic Latin -- Norsemen , Go Home ! I allowed this one to feel a litle warmer .

A Legionnaire Daydreams.

Sun at my back , I stand on the rampart
watching winged shadows from my flapping cloak
darken the earthworks.

I grow from the stones.

Sun , wind and earth ; and here am I
still guarding this world of mine; content
to know its strengths are mine ; that I hold firm
against the darkness and the hordes beyond.

Some season soon , the legions will form ranks
and stride their way along the arrowing roads;
and I rejoicing with them will gladly leave these shores
to march again to the centre of the world.

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Good Line
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 8th April 2006
One line jumped out at me 
"I grow from the stones." 
For me it would make a better title, in fact Id re-write the whole poem round it,( except I don't write poetry) Just a reaction; feel free to ignore it and curse my ignorance.

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 12th April 2006
Very good indeed. Excellent, subtle use of alliteration, and your descriptions are spot on. I love the feeling of loneliness and longing for home that you evoke in the last verse especially.

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 12th April 2006
Patterjack you are a true pro when it comes to poetry!

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 5th December 2007
Just came across this one in the blue box. I now get more from it on second reading. It's such a complete piece and evokes such feeling of desolate longing for something out of reach. Still love that line which says so much about his condition. 
Jane

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