I wrote this east enders script during 'get johnny week' as a continuation of what cold have happened had we 9the audience0 not been taken away from albert square for the week.
I would like to know iwhat scenes you like/dont like and if its worth sending in as a sample of my script writing style?

also I have formatted the script to initate a real one but if there are any technical points iv missed please let me know! Also i did have this all double spaced but for some reason it hasn't appeared like that when i pasted it in so please bear with that!!! happy reading

[Bert and Joe approach Martin who is moving boxes of bananas about and organising the stall]

Bert: [cheerfully] You all right son? Coming for a drink at lunch?

Martin: [Moodily] I don’t know

Bert: Come on, got to keep your chin up lad, get on with your life.

Martin: maybe…

[Bert walks away, Joe stops before following him]

Joe: He’s right you know Martin time to move on.

[Martin briefly nods his head. Joe follows Bert. Martin turns to serve a customer]

[Ian is washing up at the sink he has his back to the rest of the kitchen and doesn’t hear Jane. Jane comes into the kitchen sighs and then takes a deep breath before talking to Ian]

Jane: [In a stern voice] Ian you know this isn’t the way to handle things….

[Ian starts as if he has been disturbed from deep a thought; he turns round to face Jane with a bowl in his hand]

Ian: Morning. Sorry what was that?

Jane: Phil…

Ian: Like I said yesterday some people are not fit to be fathers, and Phil Mitchell is definitely one of them. I can’t stand the thought of him being anywhere near Ben…..

Jane: Ian, you can not involve Ben in this feud you have with Phil, it’s not fair on him!

[Ian looks very annoyed and starts to reply]

Jane: No Ian I mean it. No stupid games now, this isn’t about the garage or the café now, this is about a child, this is about Ben. And if you ask me Peggy is the key to solving all this. We’ve made the peace with her, we’ve just got to keep that going and maybe she can have some sort of influence over Phil.

[Ian bangs a bowl he has just washed down on the side and turns to finish the washing up]

Ian: Look Jane I’ll deal with this how I see best

[Jane raises her eyes in frustration]

[In the smallest upstairs room of the Vic. Honey is wandering around as if taking mental measurements while Billy is leaning against the window]

Honey: I can’t believe Peggy’s given us this room for the nursery. It’s so generous of her.

Billy: Yeah well Peggy’s like that ain’t she. A true diamond.

Honey: Yeah she is. Anyway we are going to have to start getting this place ready for the baby!

Billy: What? It’s a bit early isn’t it?

Honey: No! We need to be well prepared before the baby is born. We need to sort out colour schemes and everything. Dads made us the cot and we need to get….

Billy: hang on a sec! Colour schemes well we don’t even know if it’s a boy or a girl yet. We can’t start painting till we know that.

Honey: Well I don’t want to know, I want it to be a surprise, don’t you Billy?

Billy [smiles] Yeah you’re right it should be a surprise. But what colour are we going paint the room then?

Honey: Well we will have to have neutral colours, white’s and lemons and that.

Billy: You know what Honey you’re going to make a great mum.

Honey: and you’re going to be the best dad ever Billy

[Billy moves towards Honey and gives her a kiss; they are both clearly very happy]

Jake sees Danny across the square and shakes his head

[It’s fairly busy at the café. Ian and Juley are both behind the counter. Keith and Mickey are being served. Charlie and Mo are sat at a table near the door both with cups of tea. Dot and Jim are on the table next to them, Jim is absorbed in his paper. There are a few other extras sitting at the other tables]

Charlie: I’m still really worried about Freddie you know; I think little Mo is becoming too reliant on that medicine.

Mo: Yeah & after all that bother she gave me about given it too him in the first place!

Charlie: She’s just trying to do her best. I just wish she’d let us help her out a bit more.

Mo: Well she’s too stubborn isn’t she, just like her mum she is. Don’t worry though Charlie she’ll find her feet.

Charlie: You’re right Mo, she’ll get through it - its just tough while little Freddie is still teething. Any way I better go, I’ve got a job to go to.

[They get up to leave. Cuts to dot and Jim who were sitting on the next table]

Dot: You see that little Mo has been drugging her baby.

Jim: Be quiet Dorothy, you’re over reacting. You heard what Charlie said the baby’s teething that’s all!

Dot: hmmm well I don’t like the sound of it.

[Dot lights up a cigarette while Jim sighs and goes back to his paper]

[Working behind the bar is Dawn and Honey. Doctor Oliver enters the pub and goes to the bar. Honey is serving at the far end of the bar so Dawn comes over to serve him]

Dawn: [usual confidence] Hello Doctor, what can I get you today?

Doctor Oliver: Just an orange juice please Dawn.

[The doctor is being polite but it is clear he wants to get away from Dawn quickly]

Dawn: Having a good day?

Doctor: [Abrupt] Yes thank you.

[Stacey & Deano walk into the bar and wait for Dawn as Honey is still busy]

Dawn: I was thinking maybe we could go for a drink or something; I still haven’t really apologized for my behaviour the other week. [Flashes a smile as she passes over his drink]

Doctor Oliver: That’s ok don’t worry about it. [Starts to turn away]

Dawn: [Dawn sounds a bit more urgent now] No, no it’s my treat, how about tonight when I’ve finished my shift?

Doctor Oliver: Really Dawn its fine, no need to apologise, just forget about it.

[Doctor Oliver goes and sits down with his drink and his paper]

Stacey: Looks like your not going to be getting a date with the doctor eh dawn? Shame, he looks like one of the only half decent blokes round here.

Deano: Along with Bradley eh Stacey [chuckles & Stacey looks annoyed]

Dawn: Yes well thanks you two, what exactly is it you want?

Deano: hmm what do I want, well as your plans with the doctor haven’t worked out you may as well spend the night with me?

Dawn: How many times have I told you Deano? No.

[Dawn finishes serving Stacey & Deano. The bar is now quiet. She goes to speak to Honey and Peggy]

Dawn: The one man round here that has potential & he’s not interested! Then I have the likes of Deano pestering me all day!

Honey: Well Deano seems like a nice boy, he was fine when I was over at Pats

Dawn: Yes but Honey that’s exactly the problem, he’s a boy! Am I ever going to find a decent man round here?!

Honey: Course you will, you just need to be positive. Look how lucky I’ve been with my Billy!

Peggy: You’re being too choosy Dawn, you need to get yourself out there and have some fun!

[Jack walks past the bar and smiles at Peggy, Peggy smiles back. Martin walks in and Honey goes to serve him, Martin has come in for some change for the stall]

There’s lots of potential in Walford dawn. I mean take Martin over there, he’s single now, and you could do worse!

Dawn: [In a low voice] but Peggy I don’t want to be going out with a market trader! I want something more than that, something classier – like a doctor!

Peggy: Oh Dawn you’ll never get anywhere with an attitude like that. Take it from me, I appreciate the finer things in life too but you can’t help who you fall in love with [shoots a look at Jack who is now leaning on the end of the bar] and money and what job someone does isn’t everything you know.

[Dawn sighs]

Bradley: alright Stacey?

Stacey: [smiles] yeah I’m good thanks.

Bradley: glad to hear it, I just wondered if you wanted to go to the cinema tonight, you can choose.

Stacey: yeah why not.

Bradley: Okay then, I’ll pick you up at 7?

Stacey: Yeah sounds good.

Bradley: [smiles] okay then I’ll see you later.

Stacey: see ya. [Smiles to herself]

[Bradley turns and walks straight into Sonia]

Sonia: oh hi Bradley how are you?

Bradley: yeah couldn’t be better thanks. You…ah well….um

Sonia: well actually I wanted to see you coz I think you could help me out

Bradley: me? How?

Sonia: well I was wondering if you could have a word with granddad for me, you know about what’s happened?

[Bradley looks uncomfortable]

Bradley: well to be honest I wouldn’t really know what to say….

Sonia: Oh Bradley please, you’re my last hope! I’ve tried, Dot’s tried. All I want is for my own granddad to speak to me!

Bradley: Maybe you just need to give it some time?

Sonia: No, I can’t let it go on like this [looks as if about to cry]

Bradley: Okay, I’ll do my best but I’m not promising anything.

Sonia: Oh thanks Bradley, thank you so much.

[Sonia and Bradley walk off in different directions. The camera follows Sonia into the café]

[Sonia waits behind Minty to be served by Ian. Jane is in the background making sandwiches, Ben is ‘helping’ her. Minty leans forward to speak to Ben]

Minty: Hi Ben, you okay?

[Before Ben can answer Ian cuts in]

Ian: Yes, he’s fine & he’d be a lot better if you Mitchell’s left him alone

[Jane has heard all this and looks outraged]

Jane: Ian!

Minty: Don’t worry Jane. But if you do change your mind Ian, Ben is always welcome to come and keep me company at the garage.

Jane: Thanks Minty

[Minty turns to leave the café and smiles goodbye to Ben, Ben smiles back]

Ian: [angrily] Jane who’s side are you here?!

Jane: I told you earlier, Ben’s!

[Jane goes back to working on the sandwiches with Ben, Ben looks slightly worried. Ian starts serving Sonia]

[In the front room. Pauline is getting ready to go out. She has her coat on and is collecting up her purse and keys. Joe is sitting at the dinning table drinking tea]

Pauline: That Bert is doing my head in Joe, he’s lazy, he eats all our food and it’s just inconvenient him being here what with all this going on with martin & Sonia. When is he leaving Joe, he said he’d only be here a few days!

Joe: I know, I know I’m sorry Pauline but he’s a mate I can hardly just turf him out can I?

Pauline: well I’m your wife Joe! And if you’re not careful he won’t be the only one being turfed out if you’re not careful.

[Joe gets up and follows Pauline into the kitchen]

Joe: Well what am I supposed to do Pauline?

[Pauline opens the back door]

Pauline: well he hasn’t taken any notice of my subtle hints so you’re going to have to have word with him aren’t you & sharpish I don’t want him cluttering up my house anymore Joe so get it sorted will you.

[Pauline leaves. Joe is left wondering what to do]

[Dawn is collecting empty glasses. Goes to the table where Martin & Gus are talking in time to hear:]

Martin: I just don’t know what I did wrong Gus, I really don’t!

Gus: Don’t worry mate, you did everything you could for your marriage, Sonia is the one who wasn’t making the effort.

Martin: I mean I even booked a trip to Paris for her [beat] & I’ve still got the tickets. I suppose I’d better give them to mum & Joe, I’ve got no use for them now.

[Dawn turns round with a smile on her face, goes back to the bar & speaks to Peggy]

Dawn: you know Peggy, what you were saying earlier, I think you might be right I do need to go out & have more of a laugh

Peggy: There you go then.

[Martin walks towards the bar, Gus has just left]

Martin. How are you? [Doesn’t give him a chance to answer] You look like you’re in need of cheering up. Dawn here is just finishing her shift. Why don’t you let her join you for a drink….…on me of course.

[Martin looks uncomfortable at being put on the spot, Dawn stands looking expectantly]

Martin: That’s really kind of you Peggy…

Peggy: Right that’s settled then. Dawn

Dawn: Cheers Peggy

[Dawn beams at Martin, and Martin smiles meekly back. Peggy hands them their drinks and they both go and sit down at a booth. Just as they have sat down Sonia and Naomi come into the pub and go to the bar. Sonia immediately sees Martin sitting with Dawn; they look quite cosy and are chatting away. Dawn looks as though she’s in flirting mode. Sonia looks gobsmacked & Naomi obviously realises what Sonia is thinking]

Naomi: well at least he is moving on….. maybe he’ll leave us alone now.

Sonia: Yeah….

Naomi: That is what you want isn’t it?

Sonia: Yeah, of course it is [not very convincingly]

Naomi: Look, if seeing him…. [Sonia gives a sharp look]…if this changes things let me know now okay?

Sonia: No, no Naomi I’ve made the right decision, it’s just you know I didn’t think he’d move on this quickly…. But you’re right he might leave us alone now, and it’s good to see he’s getting on with things.

[Naomi goes to order, Sonia looks back at them, martin notices & looks guilty, and dawn tries to pull him back into conversation. Sonia looks upset]

Dawn: we can go somewhere else if you like, why not make a night of it and go over to Scarlett’s?

Martin: yeah sounds good

[They get up to leave, Sonia moves towards Martin]

Sonia: Martin I need to talk to you

Martin: Yeah, well I’ve got nothing to say to you!

[Dawn and he are practically out the door& Pauline can be seen making her way into the pub]

Sonia: But Martin it’s important!

Martin: I don’t care Sonia, I’m busy; I’m moving on…. [Dawn smiles at this]…. isn’t that what you wanted?

[Sonia looks hurt. Dawn and Martin leave and Pauline enters the pub]

Pauline: You deserved that. He’s better off without you, & I’m glad he’s finally realised that.

[Pauline barges past Sonia, and Naomi angrily confronts Sonia]

Naomi: What was all that about? I thought you said that you weren’t bothered?

Sonia: I’m sorry Naomi I just….

Naomi: oh forget it, I’ll see you later.

[Naomi storms off across the square]

Sonia: Naomi!

[Sonia is left standing alone. She hesitates and decides not to stay in the pub where Pauline will be glaring her. She goes also leaves the Vic to follow Naomi]

[Carly, Minty and Gary are just finishing work and are about to leave the garage]

Carly: Thanks again Minty, I don’t know hat you did to change Phils mind but I really appreciate it. I really enjoy working with you two you know I feel like I’m some use. [smiles happily]

Gary: Oh you certainly are a lot of help Carly, that’s for sure

[They start to leave the garage]

Carly: Thanks Gary. I must find Phil & thank him too. I know we didn’t get off to a great start & now he’s given me my job back I’d better make amends.

Gary: Are you sure you want to do that Carly; I mean you’ve met Phil now and he’s not exactly the type that’s into niceties.

[Gary locks up]

Carly: No I want to & thanks again Minty I’m so pleased [gives Minty a kiss on the cheek, Gary looks very envious]

[Little Mo is sitting on Arthur’s bench. Doctor Oliver walks by]

Doctor Oliver: you okay Moreen?

Mo: oh! You made me jump!

Doctor Oliver: Sorry, you just look a bit down.

Mo: No, no I’m fine just tired. Finished my shift in the Vic & was just having a sit down before I got back home.

Doctor Oliver: Oh I see. Well try not to over do it.

Mo: Thanks.

Doctor Oliver: I don’t suppose you’d like to go for a drink one night this week when you’re free? Might help you relax.

Mo: Oh, um thank you its very kind. I’m a bit busy at the moment with Freddie you know but…

Doctor: Maybe lunch in the café then? You could bring Freddie too then?

Mo: [blushing] Well that would be very nice doctor

Doctor: Please it’s Oliver

Mo: Oliver then…

Doctor: Okay then tomorrow perhaps? I have my break at one?

Mo: Yeah that’s fine, fine

Doctor: See you tomorrow then.

[Bradley knocks on the door & Stacey answers]

Bradley: Hi, you look amazing

Stacey: Thanks, you don’t look bad yourself!

Bradley: All set then?

Stacey: Yeah I’ll just get my bag [goes in& comes back out again, shuts door]

Bradley: Had a good day?

Stacey: Apart from having to watch Mo and Bert all over each other, and Freddie screaming the place down for the last two hours yeah!

Bradley: [faint smile] good.

[A Beat]

Stacey: You alright? You’re a bit quiet.

Bradley: tell me honestly Stacey, are you sure your okay about taking things slow…. I don’t want you to think …well that I don’t want to or…. Its just………………

Stacey: Bradley don’t worry, its fine lets just have a good time and get to know each other. & like you said the wait of expectation and all that

[Bradley smiles and takes Stacey’s hand]

[Shot of Martin & Dawn getting closer in the night club. They finish their drinks and both get up to dance.]

Patrick: I’m glad you agreed to come out tonight. I just wanted your birthday to be special and as it wasn’t a complete success I wanted to do something extra for you.

Yolanda: well, it is a lovely thought.

Patrick: I’m glad you think so. And from now on this is a new start & I am going to appreciate you babe, from now on I’m going to treat you in the way you deserve.

Yolanda: well I hope so Patrick because I can’t go through anything like this again, and I just want us to be happy.

Patrick: So do I babe so do I.

Minty: Gary, do you ever wonder if it’ll say like this for ever?

Gary: what?

Minty: You know you and me, living with another couple, both of single and all that.

Gary: I don’t know mate, what’s all this about any way, why you going all soppy on me?

Minty: Well it’s just neither of us are a hit with the lady’s

Gary: Speak for yourself

Minty: Come on Gary lets be honest.

Gary: Um, go on

Minty: …& you know there’s Billy & honey getting ready for their baby…..

Gary: Yeah I still can’t work out how he got that lucky!

Minty: Oh forget it!

Gary: No, no sorry carry on

Minty: …& I was spending some time with Ben yesterday and do you know what he said? He said I’d be a good dad [Gary raises his eyebrows] and it just made me think, yeah I’d like to be a dad. & then I thought at the moment I’ve got absolutely no chance what so ever ….

Gary: Come on Minty, you don’t want all that screaming babies and tearaway kids…

Minty: …. but I do want a family you know

Gary: Well it’s the bachelor life for me!

Minty: What dividing your time between the pub, here and work. Oh yeah great that is.

Gary: Alright! Well if you’re going to be like this I think I’ll go to bed.

[Martin is walking Dawn home from Scarletts back to the Miller house]

Martin: Thanks for tonight dawn; I had a really great time

Dawn: yeah, so did I. Maybe we could do it again sometime?

Martin: Yeah that would be good.

[Outside the Miller’s house]

Dawn: Well I’ll see you on the market tomorrow then.

[Awkward moment, they are not sure whether to kiss. Dawn takes control and gives Martin a long hug, moves away and smiles]

Goodnight Martin

Martin: Goodnight.

[Martin walks away; he first looks confused but then looks back at the Miller’s house and smiles]

[Dawn enters her house. Rosie is in the hall way about to go up the stairs]

Rosie: [joking] I was just about to send out a search party, where you been?

Dawn: I went to Scarletts with martin actually

Rosie: Was it a good night?

Dawn: Yeah, yeah, it really was. It went better than I thought it would….. in fact I’d say it was a great night out!

Rosie: Good, well it’s nice to see you with a smile on your face love.

[Dawn kisses her mum]

Dawn: Night then

Rosie: Goodnight love.

Jane: There was no need to talk to Minty like that today he’s only trying to help

Ian: He’s a Mitchell, they don’t help they cause trouble Jane.

Jane: [really angry] Ian what’s got into you lately?

Ian: [sarcastically] well in case you hadn’t noticed my mum’s dead and my brother has been left without any parents!

Jane: Ian, I’m sorry I didn’t mean it like that. But you’ve got to think about what you’re doing otherwise Ben isn’t going to be with us for long.

Ian: listen I know the Mitchells you give them an inch and they’ll take everything you’ve got!

Jane: Here we go again all this childishness. What happened to the man I fell in love with Ian. The mature, intelligent guy who supported me? You’ve become so petty Ian. Not just recently but all that stuff with Gus’ dog & ……

Ian: Don’t you get it! I’m terrified of loosing Ben [breaks down in tears] & if I can trust you to support me on this …..

Jane: Oh Ian [Jane hugs him, we see her face, she looks very worried]