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Toys And Sweets Galore
By JD
15 April 2006
I wrote this poem to have a dig at my kids! Ha Ha
they was not very amused when i first told them and repeated it many times!
they use to say "O" mum! as they knew it was about them!
JD

Toys And Sweets Galore!
 

Once I knew this little boy

That knew this little girl

And they both lived together

beneath the wishing well
And all the days were Christmas
Toys and sweets galore
But it did not matter what they had
as they always wished for more
Their jaws were constantly crunching
Stuffed full of sweets about
So their bellies just grew bigger
and all their teeth fell out
“so”
once I knew this greedy boy
that knew this greedy girl
Both grew big bellies
stuck beneath the wishing well!
 
JD

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Inspiration
Written by steve666 (50 comments posted) 22nd April 2006
...comes from all sorts of places, and kids are a big one! 
Good use of the title in the verse and also the beginning and end being similar works, too. :)
IN RESPONSE TO THIS POEM
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 21st May 2006
I do hope that these awful greedy children, if you know who they are, might like to read my poem "Lessons From the Past." It might give them something to think about, other than greed. I don't think the world is a better place today and it is not only children who are inconsiderate and greedy and don't have love and respect for others. You only have to read the news, unfortunately. So what can be done to change the situation is what I am asking in my poem?

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