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By kitten_princess
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22 April 2006 |
A little thing I wrote on my birthday (jan 3rd, 06) I'm seventeen today;
What does it mean?
I'm supposed to be out.
By now, I should be skilled at
Sneaking out in my sequined top and
Beaded jeans, ready for a
Wild night on the town...
If not out, I should at least be in
Some boy's bedroom
Staring at the ceiling
Covered by fake celeb girls
While he acts out the final scenes
Of puppy love.
So if I'm not out
And I'm not in
I'll just float...
I'll be sixteen and twelve months
For a little while longer. |
I was seventeen once.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 22nd April 2006 | However I now realise that I'm 16 and over 400 months.
Whatever you do KP, don't "grow up", there's no future in it.
A superb poem, and a thought provoking read,
thank you,
Brian
| I was seventeen twice
Written by steve666 (50 comments posted) 22nd April 2006 | Being in my second childhood now, i can echo what Brian said - it is far better being Peter Pan than Hook.
I liked the poem and i think these kind of musings are very personal to each individual. With hindsight, i believe it is better not to mull over what its all about, but to just live it. Even though some things can seem a chore, i like to try and get the best out of everything.
My best bit was the ending - you must be wise beyond your years...!  | i'll be seventeen in five years..
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 11th August 2006 | i'm only twelve but i think it's a really good piece. like steve said, it's very personal for an individual to think about what he [or she] is, what to become, how he had become that and what he wants to be..
keep writing!
-rilLie
0_o | And I'm - - - - -
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 29th October 2006 | | A young(sish) grandmother, but I remember thinking that one day I would be 18 and would be feeling quite "old". ha ha. Then I thought of all that lay ahead and it seemed as if life would never end. Please don't grow up too soon. Enjoy each day as you have it. By the way, I did like your poetry very much indeed. (You'd better read my poem called "Identification Emergency" - as it is a big contrast to yours (but, hopefully, funny). I do want the opinions of young people. |
Written by eloquentdukewilson (38 comments posted) 7th November 2006 | Is it required that the age of the poster be given in the response? - no? - awesome.
Sequined tops and beaded jeans - do teenage girls still wear those? - thought that fashion had gone out in the eighties. Anyway, you are the exception to the rule - stay that way.
Thanks for the read. |
Written by stellafly (7 comments posted) 3rd April 2008 | | I really, really loved that - reminds me of the feeling I have every time I have another birthday, with all these goals and ambitions I was supposed to have achieved by the time I got to that age, and yet as usual time has flown by without me realising - I love 'I'll just float' because it really captured that feeling for me of 'oh, I'll get there one day...' Brilliant!! |
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