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Nightclub 1950
By patterjack
23 April 2006
A rather florid effort with synaesthetic ambitions

Nightclub 1949

The chord is struck , the thick light dims,
the saddened couples slowly rise
to cloy again their satiate limbs
with oiled and stippled harmonies.
The broken shards of muted sound,
detritus of discarded notes ,
entomb our hearts in walls around
and drive the harsh breath from our throats.
Black flames along a flesh-pink wall,
the shadows of the dancers sway.
The blue grind of the trumpet chants the Fall ,
the growling trombone cries the Judgement Day.

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Like being there ..........
Written by Bagheera (679 comments posted) 23rd April 2006
..... I could actually hear it: Dire Straits ("Sultans of Sqwing") was playuing in my mind all the time as I read this! 8)  
 
Potent and evocative memories of early clubland - though I question if 1950 is perhaps a bit TOO far back to be accurate: I'd have thought more 1960's? More important is the overall effect, which is (as usual!) spot on!

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