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Nothings changed

By Snow-Bear

24 April 2006

Hi there, I wrote this poem 4/5 years ago. do parden the fact that it doesn't rythm, or it is brilliantly constructed and that it isn't plagiarised prior to the title. please be free to critique.

As I walked to the front door
Nothings changed

As I walked across and smelt the musty hall
Nothing changed

As I went up the creaky stairs
Nothings changed

As I entered the room and looked around
Nothings changed

As I looked out the window and saw the kids playing in the sunshine
I smiled
Nothings changed

Nothing's changed abit .

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Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 28th April 2006

Hi SB,

"As I looked out the window and saw the kids playing in the sunshine
I smiled
Nothings changed "

"Run of the mill", means that nothing's going wrong.

So we should count our blessings.

A nice gentle piece, I shall remember when next bewailing some minor hiccup in my life.

Brian

Written by Snow-Bear (9 comments posted) 14th May 2006

Hi brian sorry for not responding as quickly, but I'll try to make up for it

thanks for the critique, I'll take on board on what you have mentioned and will try to return the favour on your works.

thanks again.

As promised ................
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 17th June 2006

....... Poetry isn't my forte but this feels 'comfortable' to read.

My tutor at Uni defined poetry as "saying what needs saying in the fewest possible number of words" (I'm paraphrasing but that was in essence his advice to us).

Welcome to the club! :grin

Written by Snow-Bear (9 comments posted) 19th June 2006

Thanks for the critique bagheera.

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