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By patterjack
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25 April 2006 |
A young writer whom I admired and who circulated her poems among a small group suffered so much mockery at the hands of a few ignorant critics that she destroyed her work , attempted suicide and has not been able to begin again . Look now on this insensate lump of flesh
that once , but briefly , bore a poet’s name,
that spread around itself a golden mesh
of words to set dull others' hearts to flame.
But now the carrion birds around it squat
and croak and claw , that golden flesh to rend;
satisfied to tear it dead or not,
saving the choicest morsel to the end.
Go dip your reddened beaks in other guts,
Still other corpses lie about the plain,
for while your wings still shade the savage huts
a better world will see her whole again.
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nil satis ..........
Written by Bagheera (680 comments posted) 25th April 2006 | "Nothing's good enough ...." for a certain type of over-opinionated critic! I used the "front half" of a certain football club's motto as a "tag" because I've just heard (literally as I write) that one of my boyhood heroes BRIAN LABONE has just died.
To over-zealous critics I can only say:
 "Put up or shut up!"
If you can't do better yourself, at least don't slag off others who try to express themselves [rant over]  | Channelled
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 25th April 2006 | It may have been provoked by anger but I admire the way you have channelled that anger into creativity. That is a talent beyond me. I just scream and smash things. It was potent piece simmering with controlled fury and wild imagery. Iwish I had your ability it would save a lot on crockery.
Remember A critic is just a failed writer...but sadly so are most writers.
Reject rejection.
>> Mrs B | Tears
Written by Tansy (1 comments posted) 29th April 2006 | I have just finished reading your poem,it almost brought tears to my eyes. Very thought provocing & strong,and I especially like the line "Go dip your reddened beaks in other guts" that's right!
Tansy | VERY POWERFUL
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 10th June 2006 | I think the best poets have the ability to express twice as much, with three time the intensity of prose writers, using only a handul of words.
This is a superb example
Thankyou | Amazing
Written by Canadian_Bacon (110 comments posted) 23rd March 2008 | I agree with Tansy, "Go dip your reddened beaks in other guts" is an amazing line.
10/10 for sure |
Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 23rd March 2008 | Hm... As you described in your poem: Will the vulture's care?
Although I can imagine a very sensitive person reacting in such a way, it's naught but throwing away a life. She should have turned their back on them rather than on herself...
A very well delivered poem, though it did not invoke anger, rather sadness.
" The gentleman helps others to realize what is good in them; He does not help them to realize what is bad in them. The small man does the opposite." --Lunyu, 12.16
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