This is my first ever "poem". I use quotes as, although it rhymes (sort of), let's not get carried away and call it poetry.
Strange thing is, once I started it, the verses just kept coming and coming. It was like an unstoppable tap!
I've submitted only the first four and the sentiments in it are true - for me.
xxx
I'll never dare submit an item
I'll end up looking like a prat
I'll just sit here and read the others
Well it's safer doing that
All my writing's in my head
Never reaches keys or pen
Perhaps today I'll pull some out
Yes I will! - but then again...
They're all so good the writers here
How can I ever join the band?
I wish I could just get started
Instead I walk on shifting sand.
Hang on a sec, what's this I see?
Are all these words really mine?
Not exactly Keats or Shelley
But hey folks, one step at a time.
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Welcom to GW
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
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It's a good un
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
My first post was terminated when I shook fag ash off the keyboard and hit enter by mistake.
So here goes for a sceond time.
You'll find GW folk appreciative of all those peolpe who can be bothered to post their work here. It's the flow of new work that gives the Site Life.
Get to know the Folk better by reading and reviewing their work.
On very rare occasion you may get what's called a flamer but remember at most it is purely their opinion and nothing else.
The Poem is succinct, clearly communicates your feelings
and provided an insight into the "creative spirit".
"How can I ever join the band?"
You've done it, keep posting and reviewing,
Brian
(Do I look patronising in this?)
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Thanks Brian
Written by misscontrary (17 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
Thanks Brian!!!
You don't look patronising at all, thanks for the advice.
It's very much appreciated. xx
PS
What do the numbers mean next to your work in the list?
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Thanks Brian
Written by misscontrary (17 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
Thanks Brian!!!
You don't look patronising at all, thanks for the advice.
It's very much appreciated. xx
PS
What do the numbers mean next to your work in the list?
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impressed
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
So that is your first ever poem, have to say I'm impressed. Poetry isn't my thing but I'm coming round to it and this one is right up my street,scans rhymes and is funny, ticks all the boxes for me.
My first poem got me a detention at school, many years ago,in fact your first verse sums me up to a tee. I prefer to review it's safer
"Not exactly Keats or Shelley
But hey folks, one step at a time."
Amen to that sister...Iwonder if when those guys were writing someone said to them"Your work is ok but it's not Sheakspeare is it" didn't stop them writing.
Oh and welcome to the site
Mrs B
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Hits/Reviews
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 25th April 2006 |
The left hand number indicates how many "reads a piece has had-"Hits"
The right hand indicates the number of "Replies".
Reviews can cover a wide range of comments which include reviews, thanks or remarks from the author and so on.
Many people will "review" a piece of a writer's work but if the writer does not do a "thank you" review of a piece of the reviewer's work, some won't come back again.
We all want to be read.
So you owe me and BBS.
Brian. |
Thanks Mrs B
Written by misscontrary (17 comments posted) 26th April 2006 |
Mrs B
Thanks v much for your comments. This is a really friendly site and i will definitely be posting more stuff - if i can get it out of my head!
I appreciate you taking the time to look and write, thanks again.
xx
Mary |
chin up!
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 26th April 2006 |
 Nothing wrong withn this, misscontrary! 
Have fun on this site - that's the most important thing!
What's your main area of interest, BTW?? |
varied tastes
Written by misscontrary (17 comments posted) 26th April 2006 |
No particular area of interest Bagheera. I seem to have funny rhymes in my head a lot of the time and some of them are jumping out into this room. (Well, they seem funny to me, ha ha.)
I like storytelling (verbally) about some of the things that have happened to me and am going to try and write some of them down. Also I always seem to pick up on the quirky/funny things around me, so i suppose writing amusing things is probably my bag.
I have a couple of "tales with a twist" swmming around in my brain at the moment too, so maybe they'll leap out soon as well.
Don't want to flood the site but am on a roll at the moment! Never had the chance to write em all down before.
Thanks for asking
Mary
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Written by Noman (11 comments posted) 28th April 2006 |
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