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Heavenly Body-help at hand
By BrianRobertNeal
29 April 2006
The next step in this Socio-Economic pscycho-sexual bitter-sweet ehm ehm that's about it gritty drama.

It would have helped if you had at least read BBS' last Heavenly Story.

I'd let the woman go to be lost in the crowd and had shot back up into the sky. I was in a state of shock. I'd seemed to have the power to read minds. Once I'd got past her fear, I found I was entering the dark niches of her psyche. I was carrying a vicious serial killer, who lacked one grain of conscience or regret. Anger was her only emotion.

I'd been tempted just to let her fall, but I couldn't do it. I'd seemed to be trapped in a nightmare from which I could not break free. A  roundel entered my head and circled.

Mea's sorry,  so contrite.
Just close your eyes
and all will be right.

It got louder and louder and in the end, I closed my eyes.

When I next opened them, I'd found I was lain naked across my bed. I'd swung my legs round  off the bed and sat up. I'd seen my reflection in the mirror, I looked 20 years younger and had a full head of hair, I could see without glasses.

To my horror my body was criss-crossed with healed scars.  I could see maybe 20 or perhaps 30 of them. I stood up and then noticed a change that was of far greater value to me than the hair or the eyesight and lessened the shock of the scars.

A part of me had always been a source of shame. People, women in particular had looked at me with contempt. However it was now 50% longer and twice it's normal width. Before it had been little and weedy, but now it was magnificent.

I stared at my new, muscular, manly neck! See the little spindly one that I use to have,had had difficulty holding my head up. Unless I was careful, my head would loll onto one of my shoulders, making me look like Quasimodo or on a good day Richard the Third.

I thought, "I must now be over six foot". I stood upright, went to pull in my paunch, so I could maximise my height and found I'd no longer got a beer-belly.


I'd then rememberd that I'd a dinner date. I'd quickly dressed and driven round to her place. She must have been looking out for me, as she came straight out of her house; but strangely, she closed the door behind her!

She looked stunning, I'd never noticed her superb figure, and she'd lost that look of a startled Antelope. I'd got out of the car and walked round to her. She broke the silence, "I've had a disaster in the kitchen, so we'll have to eat out; sorry."

I replied, "You look stunning. I never realised how beautiful your are."

She linked her arm in my mine, "Come on, the restaurant is in walking distance"

As we walked off  off prattling idle nonsense, I thought, ""What ever happens, don't let me wake up too soon."

Inside the woman's body, Mea thought, "Play my cards right and I might get laid!"

Reviews
Come on BBS
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 30th April 2006
I'm waiting. For a review if nothing else. 
 
Brian.
I'm game
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3285 comments posted) 1st May 2006
Hi there been a busy bank holiday. Right sorry Brian took me a while to get this Mea has gone from the man to the woman, is that right OK that might be fun.You do keep things changing I'm struggling to keep up but I'll get there
Go for it BBS
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 1st May 2006
In answer to your PM 
 
He remembers nothing. 
 
Mea has taken the woman over and changed her personality 
 
"she'd lost that look of a startled Antelope." 
 
Mea in the Sci Fi story longed to have a body. First time they messed it all up, but this time perhaps they've got it right. 
 
Brian.

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