I've dragged this up from the vaults in response to Alistairs piece on short stories.
I't so easy to see others wasting their lives but not so easy to notice that one is doing the same with their own.
The first time that I did "it", I was fourteen.
Looking back art the seven year old I had been, filled me with shame.
When I looked toward the twenty-oneyear old I would become,
I was consumed by excited anticipation. The things that I would do!
The next time that I remember doing "it", I was thirty.
Reviewiing the fifteen-year old created a poignant sadness.
For I saw, that he had not realised even one of his childhood dreams
The prospect for the forty-five year old, filled me with dread.
The last time that I did "it", I was fifty.
The twenty-five year-old that I recalled was a stranger who fired me with anger.
How could he have so aimlesly frittered his life away? How did he let it all go?
The best that could be anticipated for the seventy-five year old; was a corpse
I shall never do it again.
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Half span off etc Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 2nd May 2006 |
| It's never too late. I certainly didn't expect to publish anything in my lifetime. I was a teacher and loved every minute of it. But I have done it - written 107 poems, 50 plus since Christmas, and published them. There are now getting on for 4000 people who have visited the website since the beginning of February. I never thought I would do "it" but it is never too late - and never too late for you either. I only did "it" because the children at the local school have encouraged me to do "it" and I am glad they have. You need to get amongst young people who are looking ahead to do "it" because many older people think it is too late. Now let's see a new poem about how you have done "it" - and did it make you feel good? |
Thanks Jean Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 2nd May 2006 |
All I was saying was I'd not look back at my life again. Perhaps I should start "counting blesings". Brian. |
Arresting Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3452 comments posted) 2nd May 2006 |
I found this oddly unsettling and at the same time defiant, sort of "do not go gently into that good night" approach. Unsettling because the idea of looking back is so alien to me. But it was well expressed as always and an arresting concept. I believe The past is a cancelled cheque,the future is an IOU the only currency we have is today so your poem pulled me up short and made me think cheers BBS |
Thanks BBS. Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 2nd May 2006 |
I write through a need to express myself and when one can get across to others, it's really great. So once again thanks, Brian. |
Read with a smile Written by Psimple (30 comments posted) 5th May 2006 |
I really liked this one. I thought if it is read with a sense of humor, a smile and and the sheepish look of one who remembers...it's not sad at all, at least it wasn't for me. It served as a reminder to me, a 32 year old mother of 5, to continue to reach for the stars. It reminded me that I am a Mommy, but there are other aspects of "me" that deserve just as much training and time in the spotlight. Every moment is precious, no? -Misti
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Written by Snow-Bear (9 comments posted) 14th May 2006 |
Hi Brian This work has a sad and regretfull tone to it. it speaks about a lot of missed opportunity's some thing I for one can relate to, but like Josie says never Give Up on your dreams for they can come true. SB |
Thanks PS+ SB Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 14th May 2006 |
For your time and your comments. I'm glad that you both could respon to it. Brian |
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