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apples
By no1butClo
02 May 2006
I think reading The Bell Jar went some way towards the formation of this. It was written while listening to a short play called...the name escapes me...on a radio show presented my Ian MacMillan. It was based on the idea of a charity that sent a truck full of sanitary products for women who didn't have enough money in places like Zimbabwe.

I'm really quite unsure of this and i don't think i've finished, so any suggestions would be welcome...

There was an unnatural gleam on those apples.
In their simple, unassuming bowl, in that
unassuming room behind the plain, quiet door.

'Room B'

It seemed silly that such a gleam,
such a hard, unthoughtful gleam, should
reside within a place reknown for 'understanding'.

The woman behind the apples was kind.
Smiling, neat and small,
She talked to me, asked me questions as
I watched the fruit stare at me.

I didn't reply; they made me feel uncomfortable,
like I had no right to be there. I was
wasting their time.

The woman spoke of so many things,
I often wondered if she was talking to herself, or some
one I could not see, or - maybe - the apples.
I said nothing.

One day, she offered me one. I took it,
the shiniest, hardest, ripest apple.

And as I bit through skin, juice rushed in
to my mouth, the flesh buried my teeth gum deep.
And as the flavour hit my tongue, so did the words.

She listened to my bubble burst in a stream of sound,
release of consciousness.

After that I never went back,
to the quiet, unassuming room.

But I will always remember the flavour
that found my tongue.

Reviews
Hi.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 2nd May 2006
Sometimes a poem is like some music in that it creates an impression that defies sensible verbal description. 
 
I'm struggling for words, all I can say is that enjoyed the poem, which I have read over and over. 
 
Brian.

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 11th June 2006
I like the way you use words - I read one of your other poems and said the same. I am so useless at taking any meaning from these things at times and feel a fool for being so lost. 
 
Whatever. The words are comfortable together and I enjoy reading your poetry. 
 
IPF

Written by Orlock (7 comments posted) 25th April 2008
I think my thoughts echo the ones above to some extent. I like the images in the poem and the mystique, but I have to admit that I'm not entirely sure what message you are trying to convey (not that all poems have to convey a 'message' as such). 
 
Is the apple intended to be a metaphor for something? A bad experience perhaps? Something that left a 'foul taste in your mouth'? 
 
The poem reminded me a little bit of that fairytale: was it Snow White where the wicked witch offered the princess an apple? There's also the garden of Eden image too about Adam tasting the apple. Perhaps you intended these images, perhaps not, but this is what it suggested to me. 
 
Anyway, an interesting piece to read. Not being clear in your message can have its advantages - allowing the reader to interpret their own meanings, etc. :grin

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