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Heavenly Body-Did it?
By BrianRobertNeal
04 May 2006
I accidentally posted this in "Reviews".

Ooops, god help me when Siddie finds out!

He looked at her and asked, "Did the ground move under your feet, as it did under mine." She just smiled and they held each other tightly. 
 
I looked on and smiled. They were made for each other. 
 
Mea One said to Mea Two-"I didn't know you were so romantic, lets go off somewhere and build a world all of our own." 
 
Mea Two replied, "How about Alpha Centauri'?  
 
Mea One answered, "Right, we'll make it our heaven." 
 
And they did. I move in mysterious ways, my wonders to perform. Don't let me down this time Lucifer.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3133 comments posted) 4th May 2006
Oh wow Brian not sure I can follow that, short and brilliant .just love that last line. I knew I was going to have trouble handing you a sci-fi scenario. Right I'll have to really think this one out ;but it is such a perfect ending, I don't know.......
Glad you liked it.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 4th May 2006
It was spontaneous and the words just jumped onto the page. Glad you liked the final line. 
 
Some points that may not be obvious, 
 
"They were made for each other "- a new Adam and Eve. 
 
Brian.

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