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The Eight O'Five Train
By Ladybird
08 May 2006

Written when I used to travel daily on the eight o 'five train to London.
Just a bit of fun.(Or Rubbish - whatever your own thought are about it)



See that man
on the seat over there?
He's the one with
the knitted pullover.
I saw him last week
with a bowler hat on
disguising his
hair combed over.
That girl
with the specs
on the end of her nose
She sings to herself
every morning.
She's got wires
in her ears
Is sometimes in tears
And often a dance
she's performing.
The kid with the bag
who bashes your head
Every time he
walks through the train.
He's nasty young git
because I've seen him spit
and I'm sure that
he hasn't a brain!
See the woman asleep?
She snores
like a drain
And the man
with the briefcase,
just sniffs.
The lady, with hat
thinks, she is all that.
And the man
in the suit,
he just whiffs!
I travel each day
On the eight 0'five train
With the bunch
of peculiar folk.
As I - stare at them,
they stare back at me
SO, God knows
What thoughts I provoke?

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3452 comments posted) 8th May 2006
As you say sweetie just a bit of fun and so it was, and there isn't enough of that in the world...or the Eight o' five train by the sound of it. 
All the better the rhyme and structure. 
BBS
The Eight o'five Train
Written by Ladybird (32 comments posted) 8th May 2006
Thanks BBS glad you enjoyed it. I'll keep taking the tablets - they are obviously working.Cheers. 
Ladybird

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