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Poetry
Chats in the Park
By JodhiDee
10 May 2006
This poem is attempting to demonstrate the conversations I had with old ladies on a hospital ward who were in the early stages of dementia.  To show how a single word can come to represent so many, different memories.  I have highlighted these words in the poem to show how a single word caused the conversation to switch seamlessly not particularly logically of course and how all this stories became interwoven into one.

"Chats in the Park,
Old dear".
"Always felt sorry for it, Henry wore a hunters hat
Shot hits the mark!"

"Stunned it was the hare,
foaming soap."
"An elegant cut in hope
to make the gentlman stare."

"Brisk walks,
accompanied by the scent of lavender."
"She was a lovely woman loved to talk!"

Warm room,
warm Care
Thoughts loom,
A life lived.

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Brave effort
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 10th May 2006
A really brave stab at something really difficult. I have some experience of Dementia and realised that the word they used was often not the word they meant which caused confusion. 
You have gone some way to capturing that confusion. 
It is refreshing to read something that attempts to stretch the genre 
BBS
I like the peculiar style
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 11th May 2006
In my view, the style must appeal to others, to those who seek for something different and original. And in addition, I like the burden of the verse. The work is short, but there's something really meaningful and significant put here.

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