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Poetry
Passenger
By gutterkitty
11 May 2006


Was I sleeping
when you
clutched
your hands on
the wheel

Was I dreaming
as you
wiped
your eyes
and looked at
me

Was I peaceful
as you
swerved
the car

Was I
there
at
all
?

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Fragile
Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 15th May 2006
Hi, 
 
I like this as it is clear and does not stray from the point. It's sparseness makes it more poignant, as does the way it trails off at the end. It feels fragile somehow.  
 
Good poem, and thanks for your review of mine :)
Oops typo
Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 15th May 2006
Sorry, "it's" should have been "its". hehe

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 16th May 2006
thanks :) I wasn't sure if the ending was a bit cliched. I hoped the simplicity kept it from turning in that direction. And I forgive you your it's :P

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