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Box-shaped
By gutterkitty
11 May 2006
I don't usually write soppy poems, so I was a bit embarrassed after I wrote this! But it is now one of my favourites.

I can't capture you in
my little boxes.
You escape away.
The one with stars on,
and the one with hate.
Maybe there's too much of you
all I know is, you won't
fit.
You're not box-shaped
but then,
that's what I like about you.
The way you dance,
and cover niceness with jokes.
The way you talk.
I can't close a lid on
your smile

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3136 comments posted) 12th May 2006
It's funny stuff ,poetry. I'm not a poet and sometimes it baffles me. I read through this unmoved then got to the last line, which was such a great little little phrase. I read it again and it all made sense, the box metaphor and the theme of containing. I don't know it you planned it that way but that is how it happened to me 
Nice work 
BBS 
(you say soppy like it's a bad thing!)

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th May 2006
thank you very much :) I'm glad you liked it (in the end!) I have nothing against soppiness, I just very rarely indulge in it
Beautiful
Written by Crayfish (11 comments posted) 14th May 2006
I loved it. Although you might not have meant this, I can identify with trying to "box things in" in life. Love, or anything so uncontrollable, just doesn't fit, which can be scary and wonderful.

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 15th May 2006
thank you, both for the compliment and for sharing your interpretation- it's very interesting! These are the first poems I've shown to the world, so your feedback is encouraging.
ditto
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 30th May 2006
i love this, every line of it... i would replace 'soppy' with 'innocently beautiful'. for me everything has to be black or white and thats kind of like your little boxes - how can people fit your expectations? i like the simplicity of it because it makes me think the subject means so much to you that no complexity is required, does that make sense?! :)

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