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| Day after Day - Chapter 8 | |
| By jean.day | ||||||||||||||
| 12 May 2006 | ||||||||||||||
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I would be very interested to hear what those of you who know about poetry really think about the poetry in this bit. Since I didn't write it I won't be offended if you think it is rubbish, but it would be interesting to know how it compares to other early Victorian poetry. I have now finished writing this book (39 chapters, 80,000 words) except for fine tuning it so I feel I can enjoy the 6 weeks holiday I am about to start. The next day, Muriel decided to sort out the poems that she would send to Mr. Tree for his uncle’s perusal. She chose her favourite eight, and decided she would get her friends to help her pick the final four. “I think I will invite Margaret, Jessie, Beth, Charlotte, May and Eveline over and we can discuss which poems will suit best,” thought Muriel. She herself found them all with merit, so she felt the decision would best be made by committee. She sent notes to all her friends, asking them to a poetry judging competition, and naming a week later, as the time, and her house as the place. She hoped most of them would be able to attend. Charlotte and Eveline replied they would be pleased to come, and May of course was happy to have something to pass the long days. But Margaret and Jessie and Beth said they were unable to come as they had much work to do on their music to get ready for a concert. However, in the same letter, Margaret said that her mother and father wondered if the various families would be available on the 18th of August for a friends’ picnic, in their garden. Having queried with her parents, Muriel wrote back to Margaret in the affirmative, and marked the date on the calendar. She hoped the Days would all be able to come, or at least one or two of them. On the poetry afternoon, Muriel provided each of her 3 friends with copies of all the eight poems she had chosen. It had taken her hours to make clean clear copies, but she felt they should both be read, and spoken in order for the full impact to be judged. First of all, they had copies of “Human Frailty”. Muriel read first, but determined that each girl would take her turn in performing the poems. Human Frailty Weak and irresolute is man; The purpose of today, Woven with pains unto his plan Tomorrow rends away. The bow will bend and smart the spring, Vice seems already slain; But passion rudely snaps the string, And it revives again. Some foe to his upright intent Finds out his weaker part; Virtue engaged his assent, But pleasure wins his heart. ‘Tis here the folly of the wise, Through all his art we view; And, while his tongue the change denies, His conscience owns it true. Bound on a voyage of awful length And dangers little known; A stranger to superior strength, Man vainly trusts his own. But ours alone can ne’er prevail, To reach the distant coast; The breath of Heaven must swell the sail Or all the toil is lost. After she finished, she said, “What did you think of it?” “I don’t like it,” said May. “It is too depressing. It makes it sound like no matter how hard we try we will never succeed.” “I like it,” said Charlotte, “and I think there is a good choice of words – alliteration, that sort of thing. I like these lines, “a stranger to superior strength.” “It would not get my vote as one to send off,” said Eveline, “unless the others are even more morbid. It really makes man out to be so weak and feeble, and he may well be, but one doesn’t have to go on about it.” “Let’s put that one to one side, as not a likely candidate,” said Muriel. Now, Charlotte, you read the next one. On the Daintiest What is higher than a feather? The dust my friend in driest weather And what is lighter than the dust I pray The wind that blows that dust away. And what is lighter than the wind? The lightness of a dandy’s friend And what is lighter than the last? And now my friend you have the task. “I don’t understand it,” said May. “What does the last line mean?” “It means that nothing is worse than a friend who lets you down,” said Muriel. “I rather like the rhythm of this one. But it is only short. Perhaps we need one with more content. Shall we put it to one side?” “I agree that it shouldn’t be one of the four chosen, unless the others are not in the same league,” said Charlotte. “Now it is your turn to read, May.” Sonnet on Madam Malibian ‘Twas but as yesterday, a mighty throng Whose hearts, as one man’s heart, thy power could bow, Amid loud shouting hailed thee “Queen of Long” And twined sweet summer flowers around thy brow. And those loud shouts have scarcely died away, And those young flowers but half forgot their bloom, When thy fair crown is changed for one of clay, Thy boundless empire for a narrow tomb. Sweet mistress of the Heart! we list in vain For music now – Thy melody is o’er Fidelio had ceas’d o’er hearts to reign, Tommambula had slept to rise no more. Farewell! thy sun of life too soon has set But morning shall reflect its brightness yet. “Personally, I like this one but I am not sure what it means. Who was Madam Malibian, anyway?” “I don’t know, but I think if we research it, we can find out, if it is important.,” said Charlotte. “I think it is about a woman who dies before her time – a famous woman, and we are left to speculate whether she will be remembered.” “I think we should put this one in the “promising” pile,” said Eveline. “All right,” agreed Charlotte, “and now you read the next one for us Eveline.” This world is but a fleeting show In grand illusion given, The smiles of joy, the tears of woe, Deceitful shine, deceitful flow There’s nothing true but heaven! And folds the light on glory’s plume, As fading hues of eve’n; And love and hope and beauty’s bloom, Are blossoms gathered for the tomb, There’s nothing bright but heaven! Poor wanderer of a stormy day From wave to wave we’re driven; And fancy’s flash and reason’s ray. Serve but to light the troubled way There’s nothing calm but heaven. “Another depressing one,” said May. Your great grandmother must have had a very unhappy life, and everything has gone wrong. She really sounds sad. Was she like that, Muriel?” “I don’t think so, but of course one never really knows. She was married and had a son, and when his wife died, she raised my mother as her own for a few years before she died, quite young.. I expect she had a hard life, but I didn’t hear that she was depressed. That is her portrait over there.” The girls decided that this was a possible contender, as not as depressing as the first one, but they still hoped for something better. Then it was time for Muriel to read again. Guildford Castle This Castle rose ‘fore Norman William’s reign, And for its master owned a Saxon Thane. Here gallant knights their powers oft esplay’d To gain a smile from some obdurate maid. And high born dames the happy visitor’s crowned While with applauding shouts the hills resound. Then blazon’d banners decked th’embattled walls, And midnight revelry illumin’d the halls! Where are they now? No more the bending lance Sheers off the gauntlet. Now the warder’s horn No more awakes the hunters with the morn. No person beats the air in scutheon’d shale. No gorgeous pageant crowds the happy gale. The rampant nettle now o’erspreads the halls. The mournful ivy mantled on the walls. Sad are the ruthless ravages of time! The bulwark‘d turret flowing once sublime Now totters to its basis, and displays, A venerable wreck of other days. “I like that one best of all so far,” said Charlotte. “And it fits in well with the one written for the Queen. Perhaps we should have a theme, about historical places and people.” The other girls agreed, so this poem was put on the accepted pile. May read the next one: Happiness True happiness is not the growth of earth. The search is useless if you seek it there. Tis an exotic of celestial birth. And only blossoms in celestial air. Sweet plant of Paradise! Its seed is sown, For here and there a plant of heavenly mould. It rises slow and buds but ne’re was known To blossom here – the climate is too cold. May all that friendship e’er can wish be thine, All blessings earthly and all joys divine, And oh may Heaven this blessing grant to me, A friend sincere and may that friend be thee. “I like the sentiment of that one,” said Eveline, “but it doesn’t fit into our theme. Let’s put it on the “perhaps” pile and use it if nothing better comes along.” Eveline read the next one. “My God” the beauty oft exclaimed With deep impassionate tone. But not a humble prayer, she named The Highest and Holy One. ‘Twas not upon the bended knee With soul upraised to heaven Pleading with heartfelt agony That she might be forgiven. ‘Twas not in heavenly strains to raise To the great source of good Her daily offerings of praise Her song of gratitude. But in the gay and thoughtless crowd, And in the festive hall, Mid scenes of mirth and mockery. She named the Lord of all. She called you that awful name, When laughter loudest rang. Oh when the flush of triumph came On disappointments spring! The illest thing that fluttering knew, The most unmeasured jest, From those sweet lips profanely address Names of the holiest. I thought how sweet that voice would be If speaking this prayer to heaven My God I worship only thee O be my sins forgiven. “I find that quite a wonderful poem – full of meaning which should well be noted,” said Eveline, perhaps the most conservative of the girls. “Yes, but it doesn’t really fit our historic theme,” said Charlotte. “I don’t really like it all that much anyway. Let’s see what you think of this last one of mine.” The Forget Me Not Oh lady take this drooping flower ‘Twill call to mind our parting shot This simple plant What ’ere my lot In silence says, Forget me not. Where on the ocean far away Or tossed about in Botany Bay When stormy winds howl round my cot ‘Twill tell thy heart, Forget me not. Even when ‘tis withered think of me Ah when ‘tis withered think of me Tho’ I no more may see the spot ‘Twill whisper there – Forget me not. And now farewell Where ‘ere I flee All hopes and joys shall rest on thee. Ne’re from my heart my memory blot I’ll ask but this – Forget me not. “I like that one,” said Muriel, “but it doesn’t fit into our theme. So far we have chosen, Madame Malibian and Guildford Castle, and of course the one about Queen Victoria. Which others should we include?” “Let’s choose the one on Happiness that we all liked, and also the one where the woman is chastised for using God’s name in vein. I think that gives us quite a wide range.” “Do you all agree on that?” said Muriel, and they all nodded. She went on, “Well, we all felt we should eliminate the ones that were rather depressing, which means we only have the one called Forget Me Not, and On the Daintiest as alternatives. I think On the Daintiest is perhaps a bit short, so I am happy to eliminate that, but I really do like Forget Me Not better than the one about the lady who uses bad language. “Well, as it is your great grandmother’s poetry, I think we should defer to you on that. We will include Forget Me Not and the one on Happiness, along with Madame Malibian, Guildford Castle, and the one about the Queen. All agreed?” A chorus of yeses, and then it was time to talk of other things and take tea.
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