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Day after Day - Chapter 8
By jean.day
12 May 2006
I would be very interested to hear what those of you who know about poetry really think about the poetry in this bit.  Since I didn't write it I won't be offended if you think it is rubbish, but it would be interesting to know how it compares to other early Victorian poetry.
I have now finished writing this book (39 chapters, 80,000 words) except for fine tuning it so I feel I can enjoy the 6 weeks holiday I am about to start.

The next day, Muriel decided to sort out the poems that she would send to Mr. Tree for his uncle’s perusal. She chose her favourite eight, and decided she would get her friends to help her pick the final four.

“I think I will invite Margaret, Jessie, Beth, Charlotte, May and Eveline over and we can discuss which poems will suit best,” thought Muriel.  She herself found them all with merit, so she felt the decision would best be made by committee.

She sent notes to all her friends, asking them to a poetry judging competition, and naming a week later, as the time, and her house as the place.  She hoped most of them would be able to attend.

Charlotte and Eveline replied they would be pleased to come, and May of course was happy to have something to pass the long days. But Margaret and Jessie and Beth said they were unable to come as they had much work to do on their music to get ready for a concert.  However, in the same letter, Margaret said that her mother and father wondered if the various families would be available on the 18th of August for a friends’ picnic, in their garden.

Having queried with her parents, Muriel wrote back to Margaret in the affirmative, and marked the date on the calendar. She hoped the Days would all be able to come, or at least one or two of them.
On the poetry afternoon, Muriel provided each of her 3 friends with copies of all the eight poems she had chosen. It had taken her hours to make clean clear copies, but she felt they should both be read, and spoken in order for the full impact to be judged.

 First of all, they had copies of “Human Frailty”. 
Muriel read first, but determined that each girl would take her turn in performing the poems.

Human Frailty
Weak and irresolute is man;
The purpose of today,
Woven with pains unto his plan
Tomorrow rends away.
The bow will bend and smart the spring,
Vice seems already slain;
But passion rudely snaps the string,
And it revives again.
Some foe to his upright intent
Finds out his weaker part;
Virtue engaged his assent,
But pleasure wins his heart.
‘Tis here the folly of the wise,
Through all his art we view;
And, while his tongue the change denies,
His conscience owns it true.
Bound on a voyage of awful length
And dangers little known;
A stranger to superior strength,
Man vainly trusts his own.
But ours alone can ne’er prevail,
To reach the distant coast;
The breath of Heaven must swell the sail
Or all the toil is lost.
After she finished, she said, “What did you think of it?”

“I don’t like it,” said May. “It is too depressing. It makes it sound like no matter how hard we try we will never succeed.”

“I like it,” said Charlotte, “and I think there is a good choice of words – alliteration, that sort of thing. I like these lines, “a stranger to superior strength.”

“It would not get my vote as one to send off,” said Eveline, “unless the others are even more morbid. It really makes man out to be so weak and feeble, and he may well be, but one doesn’t have to go on about it.”

“Let’s put that one to one side, as not a likely candidate,” said Muriel.
Now, Charlotte, you read the next one.

On the Daintiest
What is higher than a feather?
The dust my friend in driest weather
And what is lighter than the dust I pray
The wind that blows that dust away.
And what is lighter than the wind?
The lightness of a dandy’s friend
And what is lighter than the last?
And now my friend you have the task.

“I don’t understand it,” said May. “What does the last line mean?”

“It means that nothing is worse than a friend who lets you down,” said Muriel. “I rather like the rhythm of this one. But it is only short. Perhaps we need one with more content. Shall we put it to one side?”

“I agree that it shouldn’t be one of the four chosen, unless the others are not in the same league,” said Charlotte.

“Now it is your turn to read, May.”

Sonnet on Madam Malibian
‘Twas but as yesterday, a mighty throng
Whose hearts, as one man’s heart, thy power could bow,
Amid loud shouting hailed thee “Queen of Long”
And twined sweet summer flowers around thy brow.

And those loud shouts have scarcely died away,
And those young flowers but half forgot their bloom,
When thy fair crown is changed for one of clay,
Thy boundless empire for a narrow tomb.

Sweet mistress of the Heart! we list in vain
For music now – Thy melody is o’er
Fidelio had ceas’d o’er hearts to reign,
Tommambula had slept to rise no more.

Farewell! thy sun of life too soon has set
But morning shall reflect its brightness yet.
 “Personally, I like this one but I am not sure what it means. Who was Madam Malibian, anyway?”

“I don’t know, but I think if we research it, we can find out, if it is important.,” said Charlotte.

“I think it is about a woman who dies before her time – a famous woman, and we are left to speculate whether she will be remembered.”

“I think we should put this one in the “promising” pile,” said Eveline.

“All right,” agreed Charlotte, “and now you read the next one for us Eveline.”

This world is but a fleeting show
In grand illusion given,
The smiles of joy, the tears of woe,
Deceitful shine, deceitful flow
There’s nothing true but heaven!
And folds the light on glory’s plume,
As fading hues of eve’n;
And love and hope and beauty’s bloom,
Are blossoms gathered for the tomb,
There’s nothing bright but heaven!
Poor wanderer of a stormy day
From wave to wave we’re driven;
And fancy’s flash and reason’s ray.
Serve but to light the troubled way
There’s nothing calm but heaven.
“Another depressing one,” said May. Your great grandmother must have had a very unhappy life, and everything has gone wrong. She really sounds sad. Was she like that, Muriel?”

“I don’t think so, but of course one never really knows. She was married and had a son, and when his wife died, she raised my mother as her own for a few years before she died, quite young.. I expect she had a hard life, but I didn’t hear that she was depressed. That is her portrait over there.”

The girls decided that this was a possible contender, as not as depressing as the first one, but they still hoped for something better.
Then it was time for Muriel to read again.

Guildford Castle
This Castle rose ‘fore Norman William’s reign,
And for its master owned a Saxon Thane.
Here gallant knights their powers oft esplay’d
To gain a smile from some obdurate maid.

And high born dames the happy visitor’s crowned
While with applauding shouts the hills resound.
Then blazon’d banners decked th’embattled walls,
And midnight revelry illumin’d the halls!

Where are they now? No more the bending lance
Sheers off the gauntlet. Now the warder’s horn
No more awakes the hunters with the morn.
No person beats the air in scutheon’d shale.

No gorgeous pageant crowds the happy gale.
The rampant nettle now o’erspreads the halls.
The mournful ivy mantled on the walls.
Sad are the ruthless ravages of time!
The bulwark‘d turret flowing once sublime
Now totters to its basis, and displays,
A venerable wreck of other days.

“I like that one best of all so far,” said Charlotte. “And it fits in well with the one written for the Queen. Perhaps we should have a theme, about historical places and people.”
The other girls agreed, so this poem was put on the accepted pile.
May read the next one:  
 
Happiness
True happiness is not the growth of earth.
The search is useless if you seek it there.
Tis an exotic of celestial birth.
And only blossoms in celestial air.
Sweet plant of Paradise! Its seed is sown,
For here and there a plant of heavenly mould.
It rises slow and buds but ne’re was known
To blossom here – the climate is too cold.
May all that friendship e’er can wish be thine,
All blessings earthly and all joys divine,
And oh may Heaven this blessing grant to me,
A friend sincere and may that friend be thee.
“I like the sentiment of that one,” said Eveline, “but it doesn’t fit into our theme. Let’s put it on the “perhaps” pile and use it if nothing better comes along.”
Eveline read the next one.
“My God” the beauty oft exclaimed
With deep impassionate tone.
But not a humble prayer, she named
The Highest and Holy One.
‘Twas not upon the bended knee
With soul upraised to heaven
Pleading with heartfelt agony
That she might be forgiven.
‘Twas not in heavenly strains to raise
To the great source of good
Her daily offerings of praise
Her song of gratitude.
But in the gay and thoughtless crowd,
And in the festive hall,
Mid scenes of mirth and mockery.
She named the Lord of all.
She called you that awful name,
When laughter loudest rang.
Oh when the flush of triumph came
On disappointments spring!
The illest thing that fluttering knew,
The most unmeasured jest,
From those sweet lips profanely address
Names of the holiest.
I thought how sweet that voice would be
If speaking this prayer to heaven
My God I worship only thee
O be my sins forgiven.
“I find that quite a wonderful poem – full of meaning which should well be noted,” said Eveline, perhaps the most conservative of the girls.
“Yes, but it doesn’t really fit our historic theme,” said Charlotte. “I don’t really like it all that much anyway. Let’s see what you think of this last one of mine.”
The Forget Me Not
Oh lady take this drooping flower
‘Twill call to mind our parting shot
This simple plant What ’ere my lot
In silence says, Forget me not.
Where on the ocean far away
Or tossed about in Botany Bay
When stormy winds howl round my cot
‘Twill tell thy heart, Forget me not.
Even when ‘tis withered think of me
Ah when ‘tis withered think of me
Tho’ I no more may see the spot
‘Twill whisper there – Forget me not.
And now farewell Where ‘ere I flee
All hopes and joys shall rest on thee.
Ne’re from my heart my memory blot
I’ll ask but this – Forget me not.
“I like that one,” said Muriel, “but it doesn’t fit into our theme. So far we have chosen, Madame Malibian and Guildford Castle, and of course the one about Queen Victoria. Which others should we include?”
“Let’s choose the one on Happiness that we all liked, and also the one where the woman is chastised for using God’s name in vein. I think that gives us quite a wide range.”
“Do you all agree on that?” said Muriel, and they all nodded.
She went on, “Well, we all felt we should eliminate the ones that were rather depressing, which means we only have the one called Forget Me Not, and On the Daintiest as alternatives. I think On the Daintiest is perhaps a bit short, so I am happy to eliminate that, but I really do like Forget Me Not better than the one about the lady who uses bad language.
“Well, as it is your great grandmother’s poetry, I think we should defer to you on that. We will include Forget Me Not and the one on Happiness, along with Madame Malibian, Guildford Castle, and the one about the Queen.  All agreed?”
A chorus of yeses, and then it was time to talk of other things and take tea.

 
 

Reviews
Some typos I think
Written by johniebg (541 comments posted) 12th May 2006
which your probably screaming at now having read it right after publishing it. 
 
The reactions to both first two poems are identical, literally. 
 
ummnn or is this intentional? 
 
Helo, Jean!
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 12th May 2006
Hello, Jean!
Written by Bagheera (683 comments posted) 12th May 2006
I think johniebg may be referring to the short para which appears twice, as comment on the first two poems? 
Not so much a typo, more a software glitch I think, as it's also happened to me more than once :upset  
 
I profess little knowledge of Victorian poetry but I get the general feeling of "gentility" often associated with novels set in that historical period. Hope this is encouraging! 
 
Congratulations on crossing the finish line! One of my current projects (Chapel) is currently c. 60K and I think it might touch 80K before I finish, but that won't be until after a research trip to Co. Roscommon during the summer ........... wish I was already a published writer, with a smart accountant to advise me on how to claim the cost of the summer holiday back against Expenses on a Tax Return .......... !! :grin

Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 12th May 2006
Thanks Johnnibg and Baghera. It was as you suggested a formatting problem, but I did put it through notepad, which I thought was supposed to work magic on it. I couldn't find any typos except Madame Malibian - but the poems are not spelled as people would write contemporarily. They are from an album of poetry which we found in my father-in-law's bookcase, and no doubt they really come from 1834 when many words were spelled differently. Unless I have just made a mistake that I cannot spot because I don't recognise it as a mistake.
Chapter Eight
Written by paulgpaul (37 comments posted) 20th May 2006
Have you ever read 'Possession' by A S Byatt? It is packed to the gunwhales with pastiched Victorian poetry, the (doubtful) quality of which chimes with what you present. It is, indeed, 'of its time' and I find it difficult to say anything positive about it. The 'poems' have a contrived look about them, as if they've been written to accompany the novel's theme and not as entities, able to stand alone on their merit.

Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 27th May 2006
Thanks Paul, that was just what I wanted to know. I didn't think the poems were very good, but was worried if I said that, that I might be embarrassed to then find they were written by famous people and considered of great merit. The problem with inheriting something from such a long time ago, is that you have no one to ask about what it is all about. We aren't even sure it belonged to Martha Trew - and she may have copied the poems from some magazine or other rather than writing them herself. But now you have given me confidence to say that they aren't worth publishing, which is what I suspected all along.

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