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A Very Short Story
By johniebg
12 May 2006
This was originally the idea for a bigger story but I had problems making it into that bigger story. So I just decided, having seen the 100 word story exercise to put it into the 100 word framework just so it was written down somewhere.

Some people get this, some dont. If you dont then read the comments at the end. I do realise that any confusion is due to shortcomings in the 90 words I used, but it was tough I can tell you, getting the story under 100.

She stood, arms folded, clipboard held against her suited breast. Her full attention is on the cryo chamber, directly in front, metallic grey, standing on end.

His testament was to remain frozen until cloning became legal, to clone his lover from the three long hairs grasped tightly in his hand. She had thought the story sweet, until they prepared the hairs. She tapped the clipboard, the chamber disappeared back into storage. She felt certain his lover had not been a horse.

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Horsey
Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 12th May 2006
Did you mean to say - "She felt certain his lover HAD BEEN a horse." ?? That would make me laugh - otherwise i'm not sure I get it... :?
Its all in the hair extensions
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 12th May 2006
Apparently a lot of modern hair extensions come from the tails of horses.
Short and sweet.
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 12th May 2006
Years ago there were a series of stories on TV with wild twists to them.This was right up there with them. Really deserves the title short and sweet. Still giggling. 
Being a bit thick I don't often end up in the Extended forum but I might settle down with a coffee and nip over to read the long version 
BBS
The funny thing BBS, is ...
Written by johniebg (538 comments posted) 12th May 2006
You already have, and left very welcome comments. :)
make allowances
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3298 comments posted) 12th May 2006
It's the tablets I'm on I think Iv'e got teh dose wrong. 
You're right ,Sweetie, I realised as soon as I posted the review, as they say Well Duuuhhhhh!

Written by jean.day (2257 comments posted) 12th May 2006
I've read it twice, and now I am beginning to wonder if I have missed something in the stuff you wrote in the extended section. But of course you have a few more chapters to come in that. You did put a whole lot into 90 words, but I guess I'm old fashioned because I prefer the 2000 plus word version.

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 29th May 2006
Very good. Didn't get it til it was explained underneath. 
 
IPF
That rules!
Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 31st July 2007
Nice twist ending! I love that kind of thing! I also love really short pieces that set a mood, cut a slice of reality, serve it hot and leave you wanting more. Nice work.

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