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Hiding In The Forest
By shirley_keeldar
13 May 2006
This was good as a short piece of prose but I dont know if it works as a poem...
It reminds me of Angela Carter's 'The Company of Wolves', not that I think Im that good, I'd just like to be!




The forest crawls with dark hidden life
No light except the green gloom,
No sound but silent menace.
Only those creatures akin
To the dark thrive there.

The wolf disguises himself as
Something harmless;
A log, a stone, but everything
In the forest is threatening,
Everything might harm.

The wolf waits, silently observing,
Stalking, creeping round you in circles.
His mother had told him not to
Play with his food but
He left home as soon as he could.

There is no hope in the forest.
The wolf will hunt you and
You will die.

But-

You want him to rip open
Your chest; you tenderly
Prise out your raw heart and
Give it to him freely, a gift
For him only.

But-

Your love fells him.
He could be your firewood,
Your heat, your sustenance but
He doesnt know how and you
No longer have the heart to show him.

Like the trees that
Litter the forest floor
He lies fallen, infested;
Rotten because you love him
And because he cant love at all.

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Hiding in the Forest
Written by Josie (2496 comments posted) 13th May 2006
I suppose I can say that I don't like the subject - and many don't like my subjects. I found it sinister, and probably you meant it to be like that. I would also say that we have more to fear from man in the forest, in the street, in the towns, everywhere. Most people find it frightening to cross a city at night, or even a small town nowadays. That is what is most frightening. Wolves only hunt in packs, and human beings are usually their last targets. But this is poetry. You do have to stretch your imagination. I have probably got your poem all wrong, and when I read it more than once I wonder if you mean "man" disguised as a wolf - or the wolf inside the man. Interesting.
you got it right!
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 14th May 2006
...see my first poem 'Each Other's Poison' for more information... 
 
Thanks for reveiwing! :)

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