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Poetry
The Hammock
By Crayfish
15 May 2006
Childhood.

Colourful macramé like a gypsy’s shawl sways soothingly, soft against my face and arms.
Huge boughs in aching curves cross far above where fairies play-
Giant green umbrellas.
I am a queen carried off to a fantasyland in my rainbow chariot,
Irving Berlin and Gershwin serenading me from a ballroom inside my castle.
While the "grown-ups" sip lemonade by the drawbridge,
Wild, leafy ferns fan my regal locks.
A sprinkler, explodes into beads of ice, hailing down on a towel of grass,
My brother, a prince, plays in the dirt- a noble leader saving his ants from death
A sky- blue, blazing- a dome of magnificence, bearing a mosaic of clouds
Stretches above me.
If I could just touch it, sway a little higher . . .
Twist
Fall
Ouch.

Reviews
"A mosaic of clouds"
Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 26th May 2006
I love that line. And of course the tumble at the end. At first I found this hard to follow but then I was swaying in the breeze too. 
 
I liked it then. 
 
IPF
Very nice imagery...
Written by Talisker (1336 comments posted) 24th August 2006
I like it. Perhaps the lack of obvious form/structure put me off a bit - but i still enjoyed reading it. What a memory you seem to have...Recalls that carefree, dozy, comfort of early childhood for me. 
 
Oli

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