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Worlds Apart
By brook_rivers
15 May 2006

Once so close
So entwined
So irrevocably as one
 

Once so happy
So contented
So perfect together
 

Once so safe
So warm
So secure with you
 

Now so far
So distant
So many miles between us
 

Now so miserable
So depressed
So very, very isolated
 

Now so uncertain
So ambiguous
We are worlds apart

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Worlds apart
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 16th May 2006
I can relate to what you are saying, but with my daughter. However, with the words of your poem: Most are quite clear - but "ambiguous" (which I thought meant "open to two meanings") - didn't seem to be the right word. However, I think it can be "uncertain" - but you have already used that word. Perhaps there is another word that would be better. I think, feeling as I do with my daughter "unloved" is the best word here - or unappreciated. Well, if I keep thinking of these words I will feel "depressed" ha ha. Better to think of the next move forward and not dwell too much on it. It is horrible when people suddenly change and for no reason that you can think of - or worse still, they stay and get manipulative and controlling. This is worse by far.

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 16th May 2006
Thanks for your comments Josie. Yes i can see that 'ambiguous' doesnt really fit here and your suggestions would work much better, think I will change ambiguous to unloved. Thanks for that! 
Yes completely understand what you are saying, I find writing it down gets it out of my system and then, as you say, you can move forward and be more positive. 

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