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Father's Candle
By Felix
15 May 2006
Written in loving memory of my dad, who passed away on Saturday 13th May 2006. Nothing special but just something I personally wanted to write. :(

father's candle, is always burning brightly,
never casting a shadow,
never leaving a wither in the air.

even with every blow of the wind,
father's candle would light up
many different rooms,
each blessed
and each generous,
by the brightness,
that father's candle possesed.

and now, even though the wind has stopped blowing
and the rooms begin to darken,
let us not forget,
father's candle, is always burning brightly.

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Father's candle
Written by Josie (2849 comments posted) 15th May 2006
Oh - you must be a wonderful son. How I would love just anyone to think of me as a candle, lighting up even just one life. I hope you also told him that when he was alive. I am so sorry that his light has gone out because there is no love like a parent's love.

Written by nicknack28 (3 comments posted) 18th March 2008
I agree, the use of a candle for the (extended) metaphor is touching and provides well for the character of your father. I particularly like how "Never casting a shadow" is used. 
 
I'd like to suggest possible reconfiguration of the middle chunk, for the lines, though cohesive with each other, don't flow how they are separated right now. Try combining some and smoothing out a few transitions like how the beginning and ending are. One tiny itsy bitsy thing that is merely conventional, too, is capitalizing the beginning of each line. 
 
However, it leaves a pleasant memory and I'm glad it ends positively. You have my condolences.

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