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Please be in my dream

By Nance

16 May 2006

Please be in my dream at least tonight.
I know I prayed the same last night,
But when I sleep and sense your breath
I feel between the life and death.
I’m tasting sorrow, joy and fear
And setting free my bravest tear.
I live and and strive, I rise and fall
When I become this dreaming doll.
Without words that you once brought
I still belong to hackneyed thought:
Who cares for manners, charm and grace?
How much I need this smiling face!..
2006

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Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 16th May 2006

I really enjoyed the rhyme and simplicity of this poem.
I liked the images of 'bravest tear', 'tasting sorrow' 'hackneyed thought' and of course 'dreaming doll' .

Was the first line meant to read: Please be IN my dream, at least tonight ?

'and and' think this was an error.

Great read

Thank you for reading
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 16th May 2006

Thank you! I wrote it really suddenly, yesterday evening, before going to bed. I thought how much I wanted to dream about Him. As every time I have this I wake up in a pretty startling mood, with some sense of gentle miracle.
And once more, yes, you're right, that's a mistake. Thank you for noticing it. Your attention means much to me!

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 16th May 2006

I find that my mind is at its most creative in the evening too!

When you say 'Him' are you refering to God or to a loved one?

best wishes

B_R

Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 16th May 2006

Hi once more

In this very verse I mentioned my loved one.

But when I read it now I see it might be refered to God if somebody will take it in this way.

My Best Wishes, Nance.

so nice.
Written by deathstillness (13 comments posted) 31st December 2006

LOVED IT!

thanks
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 12th January 2007

Thank you very much, I'm very pleased indeed.

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