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Games
By Crayfish
17 May 2006
I need help with this.  I wrote this pretty randomly and didn't really think about it.  I like the rhyming, but I want to be sure the meaning isn't too hidden.

Is life a game?

Well, then what is a game?

Checkers, chess, dominoes?

Eliminate, checkmate, dominate,

Win or lose, love or hate,

Black and white, a grid-like fate,

If life ain’t joy it’s second-rate,

Can love be shunned, can love be late?

Is hell or heaven merely bait?

Locked away beneath a grate,

A plastic piece, a candidate,

For which hope can never permeate,

Who yells Just wait, please just wait!

But a clock ticks and a dice rolls on a glossy plate,

A warped reflecting, scratched-up plate,

And you walk with all but a steady gait,

And your death is merely a determined date,

Your power’s gone. Exterminate.

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It's a thinker!!
Written by scrump999 (8 comments posted) 17th May 2006
I have to admit on the first read everything was a bit of a muddle and i was slightly confused about what you were trying to say. i broke it down and re-read it a few times. My interpritation of it is that we are all pawns in a much larger game (life). I'm not sure if this is what you were going for but i really enjoyed reading this and love the impact of the rhyme. 
I like things that make me think a little deeper than usual!!

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