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By brook_rivers
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17 May 2006 |
I may never kiss your soft lips again
Or hear your delicious voice calling me
I will be blind to your bright smile
Ignorant of your unique scent
Void of your body’s warmth
Unable to link my hand through yours
I won’t see your Familiar face gazing at mine
Laugh with you, dance with you, cry with you
I may never, ever, see you again
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 17th May 2006 | | I have noticed a theme of loss in some of your recent posts and I think this one expresses it best. It is succint and powerful and there is so much emotion in there and that last line made me flinch. | I immensely enjoy this poem
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 17th May 2006 | I think it's something that has appeared not because It was planned but just because heart willed to express everything it had within. Am I right?
I've identified my feelings here, and I think you must really write good if someone else can sense his life while reading. Everyone-his own life, and for you - these are your heartstrings. I truly think this poem is wonderful.  |
Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 18th May 2006 | Thank you both for your comments.
Yes Nance you are right, to be honest I have never written poetry about my thoughts/life before and now I am the words just keep flowing!
Interestingly in the few that I have written over the past week I thought that this was the least poetic but it has generated the most positive reviews!
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