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By BrianRobertNeal
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19 May 2006 |
This is not meant to be derisory just an ironic comment. A caveat to all of us that love conquers all as long as there's enough money but not always for ever. PILLOCK ENTIRE
Pillock Entire, a red mist once rolled over me.
My lonely desire turned me into a Pillock Entire.
Once was a leader in a rock/roll band.
It was the finest in all of the lands.
Our hits were the biggest, no one got higher
Yet I’ve still turned into a Pillock Entire.
Pillock Entire, a redmist once rolled over me.
My lonely desire turned me into a Pillock Entire.
I met this young lady, you all know her name,
But I never guessed what was her real game.
She wasn’t for ever, she was just out for hire,
So sadly I’m now a Pillock Entire.
Pillock Entire, a redmist once rolled over me.
My lonely desire turned me into a Pillock Entire.
It’s not only the money, about which I moan,
There’s nothing as cold, as being home all alone,
So a warning to you, as you sit in front of your fire,
You also could become a Pillock Entire.
Pillock Entire, a redmist once rolled over me.
My lonely desire turned me into a Pillock Entire
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Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | Completely lost me here, Brian. Which, for what it is worth, is a first. Utterly bamboozled. I recall once reading the Introduction to Joyce's ' Poems Pennyeach' and though he was considerably ahead of the Beatles and had no excuse for not managing to scan easily he took an equal pleasure in taunting his audience. Sadly this time not at all your best piece. Sorry.
Slan. | Hi GC
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | This is one of my teases. A certain well known person is getting slagged off in the press. So I titled the Poem as a Punning aAllusion to one of his hits.
The chorus seems to be sarcastic.
But the 1st verse reminds one of his achievements.
The second points out how he finds himself in his unfortunate position.
The final verse points out the real tragedy at the heart of the matter and how the same could happen to us.
Finally I've sung the words to the tune, (Played by my wife on the piano) and it parses.
Once again thanks for your time and comments,
Brian
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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | Yeah, Ok . I got it by the second verse and followed it along. Although I don't thank you for reminding me of that God awful song (not his finest hour) I did enjoy the your clever little take on current proceedings. In fact I think you summed up the whole thing pretty damned well, as well as spoofing that terrible, terrible, terrible song
cheers
BBS | full of desire...
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | | A nice way of sending the whole sorry story up Brian. I liked it! Only wish I was in for a fraction of what the said lady will get in her piggy bank... | Thanks BBS+Woody
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | Well Woody it's certainly a very profitable way of "working your passage".
I'm no fan but when you think of the tragic loss he suffered; I've lost a wife through death, I think that he deserved better than this.
Brian. |
Written by simon.ward72 (60 comments posted) 19th May 2006 | Hi Brian
i wasnt so sure about this if im honest. I found the ryhmes a bit cumbersome and the message obscure.
Sorry | Not like you
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th May 2006 | To not like my stuff.
Still once again thanks for your time and comments. | I'm not normally one for poetry.....
Written by SammoR (132 comments posted) 29th May 2006 |
...'cos I'm slow on the uptake and most poetry is very cryptic.
But I got this within seconds and was humming That Tune to the poem as I read it.
Great stuff, you really got into the head of the person concerned, or rather into what he may well be thinking at present.
Oh...and thanks a bunch..That Tune...not one of his best...will be in my head all day today. Am about tohave a shower, just guess what I'll probably be singing..... | Thanks S/R
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 29th May 2006 | It could have been worse, I could have used the tune of the "Frog Song"!
Thanks for your time and comments,
Brian |
Written by ellipinnock (1795 comments posted) 15th November 2006 | Title of this caught my eye....read it thorugh....was completely in the dark, read the reviews, still completely in the dark....then something seeped through my battered old neurones and I got it. So I read it again....and enjoyed it 
They always said I'd get there in the end...
Elli |
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