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Mantis and Currawong
By patterjack
22 May 2006
Mantis and Currawong

Head tilted to the right
The currawong waits , perched on the patio rail
next to the thin green tree.

Something within that shrub has roused him , and his yellow eye
carefully scans the branches.

Down to the base of the potted plant he drops ,
and works his way round the edge,
stopping at times to gaze up through the leaves.

The mantis , green camouflaged , is safe until it moves
and then the beak strikes hard and true .

Back on the railing the dark bird seems to pass
a moment of satisfied contemplation ,
then raises its claw to rend the slender body .

Just yesterday , I found on that same tree
a browner mantis , battered , wound about with spider web .
I took it and set it for the moment safe
in a shrub that stands on the other side of the house.

The question now remains .
How many other insects will its slashing legs
entrap and crush , to be devoured
before another currawong perhaps appears?

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Hi PJ
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 22nd May 2006
Do you remember your PM it think it was about your reticence regarding "reviewing". It's something I share with you. 
 
I enjoyed the read however this seemed more like Poetic Ragged Prose than a Poem. 
 
I think it would read better as a short story. 
 
Nitpicky point I would capitalise Mantis and Currawong. 
 
Brian.
hmmm...
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 24th May 2006
The style of this is similar to my writing, I really like it... 
 
Poetic Ragged Prose rules! :grin  
 
(for those of us who are too lazy to turn our ideas into short stories!) 
 
Laura

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