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By oxy
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28 May 2006 |
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This hat's too small
it's cold and dark
full of kings and queens
chirping birds spotted handkerchief's
How's a rabbit supposed to get some sleep
.......by magic |
Love it.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 28th May 2006 | Hi Oxy,
this is brilliant, but don't too get upset if you don't get many reviews, cos Poets don't tend to read other Poet's work,
Brian. |
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 28th May 2006 | like your style, enjoyed your other poems too. Will look out for more of your work.
[Moved to the forum - nascent] | Short and sweet.
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3285 comments posted) 28th May 2006 | | Well, that really was short and sweet, and clever too. I like pieces that make me smile at the end. You could,maybe, turn it into a bigger piece and put it in the comedy forum it might get a bigger audience. [Moved to the forum - nascent] |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 29th May 2006 | I really like this, it's very unique. I think that maybe there's too many syllables in the fourth line for it to flow nicely? I don't know if you want critique- it's good work though  | There are as many reasons as there are p
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | | Not going to say too many words as dont't want to impose on oxy's brilliant poem! [Moved to the forums - nascent] | Childish Feud
Written by oxy (28 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | I'm sorry that I have to write this but...
Could you please tell me why you hi-jacked my work,"What's Up Doc", to carry on a childish feud with other members of GW.
I wonder how many people have been turned off from posting by such nonsense.
Regards, oxy | Not fair guys
Written by nascent (106 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | | Oxy is completely correct to ask why this work was hijacked for a discussion that belongs in the forum and that's why it has been moved there lock stock and barrel. Please keep this place for comments about the work. |
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