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Poor Christmas Kitten
By shirley_keeldar
30 May 2006
Failure to communicate.




I wanted to lie with you
Beneath the covers, snug as
One bug, and touch your
Skin like it was mine.

I asked for a kiss, not
Your whole world; you,
Once bitten and wary; me,
Grasping to adapt.

What is wrong with my lips that
I have to ask for them to be kissed?
You might have put me in a dark place and
Left me to die of hunger.

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Hi SK
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 30th May 2006
An engaging if awkward read. 
 
Brian.
awkward...
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 30th May 2006
...how so?  
 
Certainly awkward is how i felt when thinking about this one so its good that came across!  
:)

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 30th May 2006
I thought this poem successfully portrayed your emotions, and the style definately suited the wording! 
 
I am interested as to how you came up with the title? I nearly missed out on this poem as I was thinking christmas? why is someone writing about christmas now? & is this going to be a typical 'i adore my pet' poem! So I think that would be my only critique - to make the title more appealing  
 
brook
but i likes it!
Written by shirley_keeldar (67 comments posted) 30th May 2006
...the title came from a text i sent a boy who was neglecting me so its pretty integral! just think of the poor mewing creature who was loved for a day... however, i agree with you, i'd think it was a bit of smush too from the title! ;)

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