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The Puzzle That Is Me
By B.D.
31 May 2006
I want to take you with me

take to where i was

then maybe you can help me

however my insecurity

my fear of how you'd judge me

and that you might not understand

has kept me to keep to myself

maybe I should take a chance

let you go on a trip with me

a trip to way back when

everything was sweet and innocent

but my inhibitions take over

you just have to understand

I've been hurt, tossed,

loved but lost

and I don't know if I should trust you

so if you'll just be patient

stay by my side

if you can prove that when rain falls

and the strong wind blows

you'll still be the rock

the strength I need the most

the strength I've momentarily lost

then I can start to trust you

slowly help you put together

the puzzle that is me

maybe you're the one

that will make my trip complete

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Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 31st May 2006
your piece reminded me of someone i used to know... 
 
i used to say that as fast as i could take down the wall that surrounded her, she was busy building another one... not because she wanted to, but because she 'had' to, to feel safe from showing too much of her truth...which she didn't feel strong enough to share... 
 
i've probably missed the point entirely, but it just triggered memories..  
 
keep going...

Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 1st June 2006
That was exactly the point. Do you think I should extend it when you said "keep going..."??

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