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Decree of Nature
By mishmish
01 June 2006
And the scream which emanated

Could not be heard by sound

Nor seen by action.

The scream of pain

Like the mother who sees her new born child die

To feel the inextricable bonding

Slowly decrease, by the senses…

Each layer, released

But only to cringe and succumb to

The throes of ebony.

 

The consciousness

To be aware, within the green and blue

Yet entrapped…

Soaked in the perfumes of destruction

Entwined in the entropic odours of affluence.

 

Beautiful – was the time

Before the heinous haze

Pure

When virginal rivers ran with silken grace

Free of the molesting molecules from chemical castles.

 

Majestic, once stood the giants of evergreen

The true inhibitors of the mystical jungle.

Gone now – a million executions

To be a front page headline

Starving everything of the life source

So that clear is a luxury

And noxious is the norm.

 

But what of the crystals of ice?

Dissolve and expand the waters of life

So full of death

Runneth over the vacant lands with stagnant juices

Disable and dismember the greens

And gold and towns of stone.

So that the money-makers

Compact and contained

Banished to the middle line

To suffer like firesticks

Boxed in self-destruction.

Emaciated, skeletal

Retrospection through enlightened eyes

Once so oblivious

Tears from seared orbs for a life self made.

 

- And slowly SHE turns –

 

The scream like an echo from

A distant point

So far,

Not a time of design to remember

Except the imprint on the soul.

 

Son of Fire – Child of Ice

Revolve, and witness

The incarceration of the green jewel

Saviour and guardian of the Family

Heed to the pain…

 

A scream of such intensity

Can not be ignored

Let the ferocity of heat and rain, guide

The directive

To abolish, rebuild and restore

To initiate and nurture

The world of suffocation.

To breath, with pureness.

 

- Transformation is paramount –

 

Lest the scream

Enlivened by currencies of cruelty

Enhance and deafen us all.

Reviews
very powerful
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 1st June 2006
This is obviously a very considered piece. 
 
A lot to reflect upon. 
 
Thankyou

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 1st June 2006
there are a lot of powerful images in here 
i especially liked: 
 
Like the mother who sees her new born child die 
with silken grace 
crystals of ice 
Son of Fire – Child of Ice 
 
i agree with Leo there is a lot to think about in this one. I will have to re-read it to understand it better but on first read I am taking this to be a bit of a feminist piece?Am i right?. The last three lines seem to sum up the poem and give a strong message.  
 
Happy writing 
 
brook

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 1st June 2006
Thanks leo and brook for your kind comments. You're right that there is a lot to think of, and you're right about feminist angle. That's all I'm saying for the moment...Have another read!

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