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When You Reject Yourself
By B.D.
02 June 2006
I have to say that this one took...a leap of faith and a dose of courage to write and even more to post! This poem, out of many I have written on the subject, is the best yet because the others just don't seem to say on paper what I want them to say. No worries, though - as soon as I figure out my problem, you can be sure I'll be posting more on the subject later on.

my first passport says 'expired'
as if that part of me ran out
my new one is different, different words
my new home is different

my life changed and to feel comfortable
I have to walk on a thin line
and that's uncomfortable
one part screams 'forget!
let it go! it won't hurt as much!'

then the other screeches 'no!

that's wrong!'

but hanging over both remains the fact:

I'm forgetting
my memories conflict

the facts disagree

and I want to ask

'why? why me? why now?'

and the answer hangs in the air

unspoken

unwritten

a paradox

because it's for better and for worse

and I want to disappear, run away,

grow numb, become unaware

I want to embrace both

and turn both away

love them separate equally

and hate both the same

I want to blame both
and thank them too
blame myself and everyone else
because I'm like a puzzle piece

that blends well with the big picture

and though it fits,

it feels misplaced

and while I try to explain
I just want someone to listen

and possibly understand
I used to be proud because I was unique!
but I was accepted

then I wanted to run & hide under a rock

because I was rejected

and how do you cope when those that reject you
call themselves your friends?
you put on a mask and pretend they are,

pretend they didn't hurt you
and you become obnoxious at times
because if one ray of truth ever

manages to shine through
you think they might catch, not you

when you fall, but your act
and reject you even more
so, see - you can deal with them
but you know better
because, try as you might
you can never seem to fool yourself
you avoid it but it sneaks up when darkness sets in
and it does every day... so you have a challenge
that you don't want to face: what do you do
when you reject yourself?

Reviews

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 2nd June 2006
 
I the wording of the poem is very expressive but i think you need to find a structure for this one becuase one long column of writing can be a bit tedious. there is potential in it though so keep at it! :)

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