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Self-Esteem Poem
By B.D.
02 June 2006
This is my attempt to create a poem that builds me up when other people tear my self-esteem down because, after the fourth "ugly" comment, you think maybe you should write one.

when I look in the mirror

I can't look away

I see beauty

some say isn't there


I may not possess supermodel looks

but I'm not the ugly duck you say I am

and contrary to belief, I don't live in books

but I wonder if I can ever value myself again


sticks and stones do break your bones

but at least you get a cast and heal

words are more powerful than stones

and much more time is needed to recover


some may call me vain

but i'm trying to build myself up

I've lost again my little gain

and I don't see how it will ever change


they tell me there are just evil people

and I try hard to see

but still I find myself judging

how I wouldn't want others to judge me


variety is good

and I agree

but I want darkness

so no eyes can see

Reviews
Robert Southey Eat My Pants.....
Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 2nd June 2006
Well BD what a busy little Bee D you are! All those poems! I thought I'd return the compliment as you were kind enough to give your time to my work. 
 
I chose this poem as it seemed to me the least complicated. And as you will doubtless deduce since I am not exactly T. Tennyson Browning 111 when it comes to blagging about poetry. 
 
I suppose what I liked most was the consistency and the simplicity allied to economy of language. You certainly keep to an identifiable motif and use almost trite throw away words. You don't know how much I appreciate not being being whined at by someone determined to show their skill at literary art. With your kind of subject matter you could easily be on the margins of pretentiousness. But you avoid that by [ deliberately?] not tring to sick up a piece of arcane English Literature. Good on you. Spare us the poncey plainsong. A plain emotion in easily acessible language a la George Herbert. You may not get into Poet's Corner but you certainly don't belong in Pseud's Corner along with the usual emotional traders.  
 
If I have any gripe it is the rather obvious lack of humour. But you can't have everything in this life. 
 
My compliments to you. Well done! 
 
Slan!
very personal
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 2nd June 2006
very powerful and honest writing. 
 
Thankyou 

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