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Happiness in Flight
By mishmish
02 June 2006
Living in London, birds are not always common place, but I am a bird lover and I'm lucky enough to have a tree outside my window that remains full, all year round, with all kinds birds. This is a little ode to them...

I wake to the sounds of morning
Shrill song, dawn is calling
Open curtains, colours flit fast
An arc, a swoop, a glide
Fills my heart from inside

I love these little balls of fluff
Don't be surprised, small is tough
On the branch, or on the floor
In all directions, do they soar
On hearing a car backfire
Or a child scream, a whack to inspire

But soon again, once noise is past
In they flutter, flutter fast
Taking root amongst their leafy domes
The cedars, the oaks, their Barratt homes

Chattering, tweeting, making a din
Some like to sit, some like to sing
Whatever their temperament
Whatever their pleasure
One truth will always be
These bundles of beauty are part of me.

Reviews

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 2nd June 2006
a lovely poem! Mr Keats would have been proud, he liked his odes too!
Crikey...Keats!
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 2nd June 2006
Thanks brook. Keats...wow, praise indeed.  
 
I feel immodest to say this now, but I wrote it in 10 minutes straight off today, after arriving home following a heavy, exhauating day at work. And the birds were singing...they really did fill me with joy. 
 
best wishes 
 
mishmish
Lovely
Written by Katsinella (28 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
Your pleasure in the little feathered being is very apparent. It's a lovely poem, which flows gently from beginning to end. 
One minor point - the use of 'don't' seems jarring to me.  
Perhaps 'be not surprised' to maintin the Keatsian form? 
Just a thought. 

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