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By Tenchi
03 June 2006
A twee little ditty I can't actually remember writing. I thought I'd post it on account of not really writing that many truly daft poems.

If light is love
and dark is death
Does it take love to breathe a breath?

Do you need a frown
to make a smile
or an inch to take a mile?

I ask you
do you know why?
Does it take the ground to make the sky?

Do you need a stand
to make a sit
Or a whole to make a bit?

If I were you
Who'd you be
Would I be two
referred to's we?

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You need twee to make sweet
Written by Espiral (44 comments posted) 6th June 2006
Hello, 
 
I don't actually think this is that bad at all. The rhythm is sometimes out of kilter and yes it is twee, but it has a sweet little jaunty lilt to it. Good rhyming too. 
 
:grin

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