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Drowning

By brook_rivers

03 June 2006

I look all around me
The sea of unknown
With me in the middle
All alone

I am aware of many hands
Stretched towards me
But however much I try
I can’t grasp them

There is a blur of faces
I can’t see clearly
The sickly feeling of
Ice sliding down my back

I gasp for air
I fight the inevitable
Desperate to draw breath
To feel alive again

I can feel the bitter, salty water
Washing over my body
Stinging my deep wounds
And slapping me in the face

I know what’s happening
And I can’t seem stop it
There is nothing to hold onto
To prevent it

I am drowning

Reviews

Penetrating and very, very sad
Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 3rd June 2006

You've captured the feeling of hopelessness beautifully. The inevitability of the person's demise. This is a stunning piece of work, and something that is difficult to read without getting a lump in one's throat.

Morbid but magnificient!

best wishes

mishmish

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 3rd June 2006

thank you very much for your encouraging words!

brook :grin

quality
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 3rd June 2006

i very much like the subject matter, and as ever clean, conscise and compelling

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 4th June 2006

thank you everso much for your compliments leo!

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