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By ailbhe
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23 April 2005 |
Unfurled
Then we were siblings, twinned, curled tight as a Fibonacci spiral of leaves. When you spoke you bereaved me of words, your breath my parted mouth's content, our faces intent, our hearts humming-birds. Now your shell is held to my ear, one hand curled tight around and bereft. With the other, I turn over leaf after leaf, my breast your cupped hand's catch, my future balanced on your belief. |
Written by ailbhe (6 comments posted) 23rd April 2005 | | oops sorry I didn't mean for all that underlining to be there...! | no probs Written by nascent (106 comments posted) 23rd April 2005 | | fixed for you | liked the imagery Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 4th May 2005 | i might be suffering from fikness but it lost me a bit in ambiguity i couldn't make out siblings or lovers a shell, a book -help | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 9th October 2006 | This is quite beautiful. I also had trouble understanding if this was about twins or lovers; I imagined, at the end, that it must be about lovers who knew each other as intimately as twins. I liked the ambiguity. Poems should be written to be understood, but sometimes ambiguity -- if it is not overwhelming or sloppily used -- is gentler than a straightforward, cut-and-dried presentation. |
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