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Poetry
Unfurled
By ailbhe
23 April 2005

Unfurled


Then we were siblings, twinned, curled
tight as a Fibonacci spiral of leaves.
When you spoke you bereaved me of words,
your breath my parted mouth's content,
our faces intent, our hearts humming-birds.
 
Now your shell is held to my ear,
one hand curled tight around and bereft.
With the other, I turn over leaf after leaf,
my breast your cupped hand's catch,
my future balanced on your belief.

Reviews

Written by ailbhe (6 comments posted) 23rd April 2005
oops sorry I didn't mean for all that underlining to be there...!
no probs
Written by nascent (106 comments posted) 23rd April 2005
fixed for you
liked the imagery
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 4th May 2005
i might be suffering from fikness 
but it lost me a bit in ambiguity 
i couldn't make out  
siblings or lovers 
a shell, a book -help

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 9th October 2006
This is quite beautiful. I also had trouble understanding if this was about twins or lovers; I imagined, at the end, that it must be about lovers who knew each other as intimately as twins. 
 
I liked the ambiguity. Poems should be written to be understood, but sometimes ambiguity -- if it is not overwhelming or sloppily used -- is gentler than a straightforward, cut-and-dried presentation.

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