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Poetry
Airport (revised)
By mishmish
05 June 2006
I had this poem floating round in my head while going to pick up someone from Heathrow on Sunday, I thought I'd better get it down and post it while it was fresh in my mind.

I’ve been thinking
An airport is a funny thing
Both sadness and happiness
Does it bring.
Dreams are lost…
…and found
Each time a plane takes off
Or lands on the ground

Inside the terminal
Such a huge cavern
Where anything could
And usually does happen

A microcosm of ordered upheaval
A universe massed
With confused, tired people

Immigrant workers,
Expectancy in their eyes
Not knowing the promises
Were just cold, hard lies

Agitated businessmen
Watching the time
Long straggly queues
Forever out of line

Screaming kids
Craving parents’ attention
Grungy travellers
Baulking convention

Cool couples decked in Versace
Spending thousands on jeans
Well, that’s just beyond me
Anxious security guards
Eying the gathered throng
MP3 clad teenagers
Checking the latest song

An airport…
Receptacle of souls
Collector of emotions
Much more than just a place
To buy sun lotion.

Reviews

Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 5th June 2006
really liked this piece, nice touch of humour in there too. The rhythm and the flow of the poem worked well. 
 
If i was to be picky the following lines were a bit akward: 
 
Does it bring 
Well, that’s just past me 
 
The change in the last stanza from four to five lines was a good way of finishing the poem and the overall effect was created a brilliant poem! 
 
Best Wishes 
 
Brook 

Written by mishmish (389 comments posted) 6th June 2006
Thanks brook. 
 
You're right about the two lines. The terrible typist that I am missed a word. 
 
I'm going to repost again with the slight ammendments. 
 
with best wishes 
 
mishmish

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