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Gone Fishing
By ailbhe
23 April 2005
Gone Fishing
 
War. And one slippery girl
will not take the bait.
She swims off to stop it,
 
leaves me dangling, thumb-sucking,
plucking patterns from tea leaves,
scanning advice slips from bank machines,
clutching at strings.
 
I'd swing
from the cat's cradle of clouds
spanning borderless skies
if I believed it would catch me
and knit me
into any design;
I'd loop-the-loop,
crossing, re-crossing truths,
 
but it all comes loose. Nets become sieves,
knots become loops.
I feel that old slack -
no certainty to pull taut,
make sing, draw back
that girl-fish
or tightrope out and join her
stitched fast to a bridge across the Tigris.

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Liking your poetry
Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 26th April 2005
very much but it all has swirling , hidden depths so I am going to consider it all in much more study before I comment further. 
 
spidey
Hidden Depths
Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 24th May 2006
A phrase used in the last review - hidden depths. I normally get annoyed with a poem I don't "get" quckly but read this three of four times because, while not necessarily knowing what the writer meant, I enjoyed the imagery. 
 
Eventually I came up with what I thought it was and loved it. Particulalry the third stanza which felt like my way in to the whole thing, 
 
IPF
Nibble
Written by andybyers (170 comments posted) 2nd August 2007
I like a poem that's a little bit obscure, open to interpretation, hints at feelings and experiences. You bring something new to the mind here. The imagery and wordsmithing are delightful in themselves, regardless of the overall intention of the work, if there actually is one. I have my own guess. :)

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