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To the Man I once called Father
By laya08
07 June 2006
 
Did you love me..
Please answer that
Did you even care at all
You left with no good bye
Just your imprints on that wall
(Yes I remember that)

I was just a little girl
Helpless and needed love
You had none to give
So you just left and flew like a dove
But I was still a little girl
Yes.. a little girl indeed
I needed a father
A true father for me

So as my mother cried
As your true heart just died
You didn’t even speak
Not a word at all
Just went out that door
You just left us poor and weak


Now in the end
I’ve grown
I'm not a little girl any more
Can't you see?
Or do you still try to ignore?
But with you in my past
I have let you go
Let you be
I have nothing for you
Yet you still nothing for me


Reviews
powerful writing
Written by Leo (573 comments posted) 6th June 2006
very much enjoyed this. 
 
'just your imprints on the wall' is something that i can very much identify with 
 
very moving, and powerful
Very heartfelt
Written by LynB (435 comments posted) 31st August 2006
I really identified with this poem. I had a loving relationship with my own dear late father, so it breaks my heart to see my son growing up without his. He hasn't seen him since he was 8, and he's 14 now. This poem describes his feelings perfectly.  
 
I loved it, it really touched my heart. :)
Loved it!
Written by deathstillness (13 comments posted) 3rd January 2007
Amazing expressions of feeling. I lost my dad, so I know what you are talking about here.

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