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IT HURTS HER SO
By writerpoet
08 June 2006
THIS IS A TRUE POEM,ABOUT SOME ONES LIFE.

 

SHE WAS BUT A CHILD

A FINE BONNY GIRL

UNTIL SHE HEARD THESE SAD WORDS

 

HE HATES HER SHE SAID

AS SHE LAY UNDER THE BED

HIDING FROM WORDS

THAT HER MOTHER SAID

 

WHEN SHE WAS TEN

SHE PLAYED IN THE TREE

LOOKING FOR LOVE

WITH A HOPEFULL PLEA

 

THIRTEEN SHE BECAME

STUPID AND INANE

ONLY PLAYING WITH BOYS

WAS SHE INSANE

 

FIFTEEN WAS THE DAY

THAT PLAYED ON HER MIND

OH WHY OH WHY IS EVERYONE UNKIND

 

THEN A MAN CAME A STALKING

BUT DID THE LOVE COME A WALKING

OH NO HE HATED HER SO

 

THEN NEXT SHE WAS UNHAPPY

SHE MUST HAVE BEEN BLIND

NO WHERE COULD SHE GO

TO HEAR I LOVE YOU SO

 

BRUTAL AND WICKED

HER LIFE NOW BECAME

DRINKING AND DRUGS

THEY SAID SHE IS TO BLAME

 

PRISON OH DEAR

HOW SAD SHE IS NOW

THEN SUDDENLY SHE HEARS

HER NAME OH SO SLOW

 

MY DARLING MYLOVE

YOUR DIFFERENT YOU KNOW

TO HEAR MY NAME WAS SUCH A BLOW

 

OF COURSE IM DIFFERENT

AS I GOT OUT OF JAIL

I THINK IM GOING TO LIVE

TO TELL MY TALE

 

A LONG TIME HAS GONE BY

IF ONLY ID KNOWN

HOW QUICKLY MYLIFE

HAS FLOWN AND FLOWN

 

IV MET A GOOD WOMAN

I LOVE HER SO MUCH

BUT MY PAST MAY COME BACK

AND DESTROY ALL MY TRUST

 

SHALL I TELL MY LOVE

ALL THATI HAVE DONE

WILL THIS SPOIL MY HEART

THAT WAS SOARING LIKE A DOVE

 

SHE ANSWERS MY LOVE

YOUR HEART IS MINE

DON’T TELL ME A LOT AND WE WILL BE FINE

 

YOUR SECRETS ARE YOURS

AND I LOVE YOU SO

WHATEVER YOU HAVE DONE

NO ONE WILL KNOW

 

SO NEVER DESPAIR

AND TRUST IN YOUR LOVE

YOUR TIME IS PRECIOUS

AND SO IS GOD ABOVE.

 

 

Reviews

Written by brook_rivers (486 comments posted) 9th June 2006
I think this would serve better as a short story. 
 
Best wishes 
Brook

Written by laya08 (10 comments posted) 9th June 2006
I loved it , I did. I understood what you meant and how your reactions to everthing and your feelings. But like he said above, you might want to place it into a short story. That way you can express more and you have more to tell. But like I said before , I loved it , I did.
He loves her so
Written by Ninny (2 comments posted) 1st August 2006
no offence but please dont turn this into a short story...as it is it skims gracefully over areas of pain and hope....you do not need to expand on these. The style and setting just as you have it is excellent. 
 
Think of memories and thought processes, and all your many reactions skimming randomly by....You have managed to encapsulate intense experiences of pain and joy and hope in tiny fragmentary sentances, yet which contain SO much. 
 
its brilliant as it is. dont change it please. 
 
thanks, Ninny

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